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15th Sustainment Brigade (United States)[edit]

This article seems to be the same quality as my other GAs, but it has failed two (questionable) GANs and I'm getting impaitent with it. Looking for ways to get the article to A-class quality. -Ed!(talk)(Hall of Fame) 04:10, 2 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin[edit]

Not bad, overall, but a few areas that might be suitable for improvement:

  • Is there any more detail available on what the unit did in Vietnam? Certainly, if they received a Presidential Unit Citation, I'd expect there to be some material covering their activities, if only on the level of the citation itself. (Or were the awards given to all of 1st Cavalry, with the support group receiving them indirectly? If so, that's not really clear from the text.)
 Done Info was copied from the 1st CAV DIV page. -Ed!(talk)(Hall of Fame) 23:17, 4 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • {{command structure}} might be a suitable replacement for or complement to the long in-text lists of subordinate units.
 Done added. -Ed!(talk)(Hall of Fame) 23:17, 4 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Legacy" is a poor name, given that the unit is still active. Perhaps that section could simply be merged into the OIF section?
  • Using rowspan= in the campaign streamers table would help eliminate the repetition of "Vietnam War".
Sorry, I'm not familiar with that practice. How should I use it? -Ed!(talk)(Hall of Fame) 19:20, 4 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I've changed the table to use it; please feel free to revert if you don't like the result. Kirill (prof) 12:31, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Keep up the good work! Kirill (prof) 03:58, 5 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Leithp[edit]

  1. It might benefit from trimming some of the more technical language, to assist readability for the layman: e.g. "most of the units of the 1st Cavalry Division that were not assigned to the major subordinate maneuver commands", "the Special Troops Headquarters was reorganized under the Pentomic concept of Headquarters, Division Trains. This designation immediately predates the DISCOM designation.", "task organized under their supported maneuver brigade" Concepts and terms like these are not widely understood or used by those outwith the US Army.
     Done reworded. -Ed!(talk)(Hall of Fame) 01:08, 5 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  2. Are VC casualty figures taken from the US Army considered reliable?
     Done I changed it to "which, according to the US Army, saw 5,400 enemy killed and 2,000 captured." because there doesn't seem to be any source that contests that data. -Ed!(talk)(Hall of Fame) 23:21, 4 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  3. An image from the Vietnam deployment would be good.
  4. The abbreviation HHC isn't explained.
     Done in Organization section. -Ed!(talk)(Hall of Fame) 23:18, 4 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  5. "Southwest Asia"... wouldn't "the Middle East" be a more commonly used term?
     Done -Ed!(talk)(Hall of Fame) 23:18, 4 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I hope that helps. Leithp 21:53, 4 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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