Wikipedia:Peer review/Ryan Leaf/archive1

Add links
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

Ryan Leaf[edit]

I've been working in this article for the last few days all this all-time sports flop. I really want to get this to WP:FAC and make this an WP:FA. Any advice. Thanks Jaranda wat's sup 04:33, 30 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Some have called his choice of courses ironic, given his extremely poor relations with the media as an NFL player." Needs a specific source. Christopher Parham (talk) 05:53, 31 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I removed it has obvious unsourced PoV. Thanks Jaranda wat's sup 06:08, 31 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • I did some very minor tidying but I can't see much wrong with it (I must be getting tired). Yomangani 23:58, 1 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • The article looks pretty good. The lead could be a better summary - its misssing some important facts like how long he actaully played or his injuries which seem to have contributed to his failure, it should follow a more chronological line with what he is doing now last; then there is this critics was largely due to his immaturity, arrogance, and poor work ethic which is totally weasley and the only thing in the lead that really needs to be backed up by a cite. Quotes shouldn't be in italics per the MoS. The article also needs a good copyedit.--Peta 03:19, 2 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Retrieved from "https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:Peer_review/Ryan_Leaf/archive1&oldid=192537527"