Wikipedia:Peer review/Mumbai/archive2
Mumbai[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because this was delisted in the FAR process. Comments to elevate this article to FA status again will be helpful.
Thanks, KensplanetTC 17:13, 7 July 2009 (UTC)
When this goes to FAC, Ealdgyth will ask you about the ancient sources used in the history. While da Cunha was labelled 1993, it is re-scan of a really old book. Are newer ones available? YellowMonkey (cricket calendar poll!) paid editing=POV 06:41, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
- Still a few pp 7-8 with hyphens not ndash
- I couldn't find the 25% of industrial output in the main body. The lead is not supposed to introduce new information. If it isn't already, add it in the main body. Does Mumbai really make 25% of factory goods in all of India???
- Might get more questions about Green and Fairclough as it is a "juvenile non-fiction" book targeted at younger children.
- The FA reviewers will probably ask for a copyedit. I could find some oddities in there.
- "largest" can be ambiguous. Is this the population or the size of the official city boundary?
- In the lead "7" is used. Single digit numbers are supposed to be spelled out
YellowMonkey (cricket calendar poll!) paid editing=POV 06:52, 8 July 2009 (UTC)