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I've listed this article for peer review because since it was promoted to GA a year and a half ago, it has received significant expansion by many other well informed editors, and I believe it is close to becoming a candidate for FA.

Thanks, Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 06:39, 4 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]


Tim riley comments

This is a fine article, and I can well see why you have FAC in your sights. To do it justice I shall need to have several goes at it. First go herewith:

  • General
    • Spelling – you need to standardise (or standardize) on "–ise" or "–ize" throughout, and "–isation" etc too. According to the OED, "–ise" is the idiomatic British usage. (Americans prefer "–ize", it seems.)  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 16:00, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Disambiguation links
  • Lead
    • "due its" – intended to be "due to its", probably, but Fowler et al frown on that construction and would have you write "owing to its" or (better) "because of its"
    • "remains the largest local employer to the present day" – do the last four words add anything?
    •  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 16:53, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Bronze Age to Monastic Times
    • Too much upper case here: the M and the T should be lower case (unless it's a newspaper: "Top Abbots of tomorrow read The Monastic Times today", but I digress, sorry)  Done - 'Bronze Age' is aways capitalised; 'monastic times' is just a phrase. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 16:53, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "the 'Shire Ditch'" – the MoS prefers double quotes, and if taking this to FAC I think I'd comply  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 16:53, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Cutting, a mountain pass through the hills was" – needs a comma to close the subordinate clause  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 16:56, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "amply demonstrates the archaeological potential of this largely neglected landscape, and provide food for thought for a number of research projects" – please check source: does it really switch from singular ("demonstrates") to plural ("provide") within the sentence?; 'A study made' is the noun clause that is the subject of the sentence
      • Yes, but "A study ... provide food" is not English, and I doubt if the original author used a plural verb with a singular noun. Tim riley (talk)
    • "Malverns, left" – why the comma?  Done Removed --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 16:53, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Late Bronze Age through the Norman conquest" – unexpected (and unwelcome) Americanism ("through") here.  Done (we have some AE speakers here who may not be aware of WP:ENGVAR. Norman Conquest also capitalised per OED and BBC. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:20, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "The Longdon and other marshes … was grazed by cattle" – were grazed, surely?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:20, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Monastic Malvern
    • "History waits another thousand years before describing…" – A bit florid for an encyclopaedia article? I don't think you'll get it past the FAC scrutineers.  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:20, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "…that is mentioned in the Domesday Book. A motte-and-bailey castle that was" – "that is … that was"" – jingle could be remedied by removing "that was".  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:20, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "'Gervase of Canterbury, Mappa Mundi (Rolls ser.)'." – more single quotes that I suggest you make double  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:42, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Post dissolution
    • "A crown grant" – but upper case Crown two lines later. (I prefer the latter, but as the retired librarian of the Crown Estate I would, wouldn't I?) - debatable. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:42, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
      •  Done Fair point though. Page 11 of text refers to reigning monarch of the day, namely Queen Elizabeth. So Crown is used as proper noun in this context, and I don't think worth being a sticking point. Wotnow (talk) 10:25, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Development as a Spa (17th-19th centuries)
    • Upper case "Spa" in sub-section header?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:42, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "the physician of the Duchess of Kent" – need the blue link include the definite article?  Done but debatable. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:42, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "for her development of hillside walks" – not quite clear what this means: did she have them laid out, paths cut etc or just encourage people to go on them? - The editor who supplied the source will need to expand this.
      •  Done I didn't supply the source, but the Chambers reference is online, and easy enough to check out. Per pp.71-72, it was her patronage which contributed to the development of the walks. Wotnow (talk) 10:48, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Bottling and the shipping" – you could lose the definite article here, I think  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:42, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "clinics in Malvern,[46] (Holyrood" – is the comma needed?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 17:42, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "villas" – blue link really necessary? ✗ Not done I'm not sure about this. In contemporary English (thanks to estate agent puffery, villa has come to mean practically any bungalow on a typical housing estate. Here it is used in its traditional sense of a large upper-class country home. The link may provide some clarification for readers. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 18:53, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
      • I agree with Kudpung on this one. The term can nowadays be nebulous. The article which the villa link takes the reader to is consistent with the sense in which the term is used in the Malvern article, thus facilitating understanding for those readers interested. Wotnow (talk) 11:05, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "who was an outspoken protagonist" – unexpected noun! Fowler frowns on the notion that "'protagonist' is an improvement on 'champion' and 'leader'."
    • "from as far Manchester" – as far as…  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 18:53, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "London-Worcester-Hereford" – en-dashes, not hyphens, wanted here  Done = but only to comply with MOS. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 18:53, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "The area was well suited for schools" – this sentence is a marathon and ought, I think, to be chopped in two or even three.  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 18:53, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Twentieth century
    • You use numerals in the section headings for earlier centuries: should it be "20th" rather than "Twentieth" here?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 19:13, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "provides a list and where they can be obtained" – verb missing between "and" and "where"?
    • Did I say "marathon" about an earlier sentence? What about the one beginning, "In particular, a pictorial …", which is more than 100 words! Précis, I implore you!
    • "Queen mother" – no upper case M? Poor old soul!  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 19:13, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "TRE scientists" – it's so long since we last met the Telecommunications Research Establishment that I wonder (but am not sure) if it might help your readers to spell it out in full again at this mention. Please ponder.  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 19:13, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

That's my first batch of comments. More to come. Tim riley (talk) 12:55, 5 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Round Two
  • Governance
    • Nothing whatever to grumble at
  • Town Centre
    • "In the heart of the town… two "the town"s in close proximity – could the second be changed to "locally" or some such?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 09:22, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • Does "supermarkets" really need a blue link?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 09:22, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "a former steep and narrow back lane" – not quite clear of the import of this: in what sense "former"?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 09:22, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Most of the traditional high street shops… - two things about this; the list of traditional shops reads rather oddly, and might perhaps be better as "tailors, butchers, bakers, grocers"; and the list of modern intruders goes on rather a lot and could be pruned by half, I'd say, without losing the point.  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 09:22, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "by the same architect" – who was…?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 09:22, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Climate
    • General: The WP MoS prescribes lower case for compass points. At present the article is inconsistent ("between the Cotswold hills to the east, the Welsh Hills and Mountains to the West, and Birmingham plateau to the north"). Better to standardise on lower case throughout the article (except within quotations, naturally)  Done GyroMagician (talk) 15:58, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "caused by virtue of it nestling" – a gerund would be grammatically preferable here: "caused by virtue of its nestling"  Done GyroMagician (talk) 15:58, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "slight fohn effect" – an unfamiliar phrase to me: could it be blue linked?  Done GyroMagician (talk) 15:58, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • Second paragraph. Punctuation needs correcting. The hyphen after "occur" should be a full stop and that after "urban areas" should be either an en-dash or, preferably, a semicolon.  Done I think, although the paragraph is still rather a tangle GyroMagician (talk) 15:58, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "weather observing sites" – hyphenation needed in "weather observing"  Done GyroMagician (talk) 15:58, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "122.9 days of the year" – full stop needed at end  Done and we don't really need 4 significant figures here GyroMagician (talk) 15:58, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Population development
  • Research and development
    • The Churchill quote (no link for WSC?) defeats me. It is not clear who is being quoted or what he is saying. I suggest you paraphrase. The Renwick quote is just about intelligible, but having two lots of square brackets in one short quote makes me think that again you'd be better paraphrasing the gist into your own words. Nota bene* I'm not sure such in-depth coverage of TRE/RRE is necessary. They have their own articles and I would prefer to revert some it closer to an earlier version. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:04, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "radar" – blue linked twice in this sub-section; once would surely suffice?
    • "University that gave" – better as a describing rather than a defining clause, so "University, which gave"
    • "partly privatised" – not sure, but possibly a blue link for "privatised" might be helpful to non-UK readers unfamiliar with the British practice of selling off the family silver.  Done Common term with a dicdef, but rephrased for those who might not know it. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:15, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Manufacturing
    • "series-built automobiles" – an unfamiliar term; could we have it explained or linked, possibly?  Done A fairly common term. Paraphrased, but still means the same thing. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:15, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Agriculture and horticulture
    • "William Crump and Dr. Brent Elliott" – a few words before the names of these gentlemen would be helpful to the reader, e.g. "the lobelia pioneers William Crump and Dr. Brent Elliott" or some such.  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:41, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Architecture
    • "are graced by many examples" – "are graced" is a touch POV. Suggest something more neutral, such as "contain"  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:41, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "and have since been further converted" – all of them? Or "and some have since been further converted"?  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:41, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "The Imperial Hotel in red brick ..." – another mile-long sentence that needs chopping up.  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:41, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "which in 1927 it became part" – the "it" seems to be an intruder  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:41, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Malvern Water" – earlier you have "Malvern water" – consistency of capitalision wanted.  Done Malvern Water is the capitalised brand name of the commercialised product. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:41, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • I should be mightily surprised if the long and not very readable list of Pevsner's recommendations survived FAC. I suggest you pick out no more than five representative examples for the main text and footnote the rest.  Done Moved to Places of worship. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 10:41, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Music
    • "Sir Edward Elgar" – blue link needs adjusting so that it doesn't just link to his surname leaving the "Sir Edward" in black.
    • "Master of the King's Musick" – why in italics?  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:04, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • Land of Hope and Glory premiere – citation needed. (I confess, as the principal contributor to the Elgar article, that I didn't know this.) Nota bene*
      • Later: I've combed my groaning Elgarian shelves and all the online resources I can think of for confirmation of this, and have drawn a blank. Tim riley (talk) 16:37, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "of Elgar on gazing" – eh?  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:04, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "stands on Belle Vue Terrace" – creeping Americanism: let us defend the English idiom, "stands in Belle Vue Terrace" (et passim, including image captions)  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:04, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "1903 by Sir Edward Elgar" – just Elgar  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:04, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "and is specialised in" – specialises in?  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:04, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Renaissance, Baroque, Classical, Romantic and Contemporary" – frantic rush of Unnecessary Capital Letters here
    • "It is one of the oldest concerts clubs…" – tripartite sentence with two linking "and"s. Suggest chopping up. And "concerts clubs" strikes a subtly off-key note: "concert clubs", possibly? Not sure, but please consider.  Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:04, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "as of 2011 …" – this is the fourth or fifth "as of" in the piece" – not an elegant construction, and certainly not to be repeated too often. The MoS asks us to avoid information that is liable to get out of date, if possible, and this would be better as "Michael Kennedy was appointed chairman in [date]".  Done Paragraph recast. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:31, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "The Autumn in Malvern Festival" – I think I'd put this in inverted commas or even italics. {{done} italics. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:31, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "lived in West Malvern for a while" – too vague: dates, please  Done & ref added. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:31, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "from most of the 1940s" – for most of them?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:31, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Dramatic arts
    • Heading: why "Dramatic arts" rather than "Drama"?  Done Nota bene* There is an anchor her - anyone know what it's for? --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:59, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Malvern theatre" – earlier given as "Malvern Theatres", plural and capitalised. ✗ Not done 'Malvern theatre' refers to the amenity' while the corporate name of the association that governs is it name is 'Malvern Theartes'. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:59, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "premiers of works" – premieres  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:59, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "two by Bernard Shaw" – (i) which two? and (ii) just "Shaw" on second mention in the one para; citations, too, please Nota bene*
      • I'm sure I can find this information on my shelves if you have problems sourcing it. Let me know. Tim riley (talk) 15:23, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
      • According to Garrard (2010) p.147, five of his plays including The Applecart had their British premier at Malvern, and the world premiere of Geneva was presented at Malvern in

1938. Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 00:13, 1 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

    • "dramatist's 100th birthday" – I question whether it is idiomatic to refer to the birthday of someone who isn't alive. Would the sentence lose anything if you deleted the subordinate clause altogether?  Done subordinate clause removed. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:59, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "a Shaw centenary week" – consisting of…?
    • "government Department for Culture, Media and Sport" – reads oddly; one wouldn't say "the government Home Office" or "the government Ministry of Defence". And blue link the Department, perhaps? ✗ Not done diambiguates from any other departments such as, for example, a local government dept. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:59, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Malvern Fringe Festival" – why link at second, rather than first, mention? ✗ Not done can't see it. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:59, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Elgar" – unnecessary blue link  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 11:59, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Literature
    • "the earliest poetical allusion" – I reckon this should be "the earliest poetic allusion"" – "poetical" being a word of aesthetic judgment and "poetic" simply meaning "to do with poetry" (cf historic/historical), but I am quite prepared to be told I'm wrong. Done You're right. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 12:09, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "named after Langland" – "named after him", possibly?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 12:09, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "17th-19th" – en dash for hyphen in date ranges (MoS)  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 12:09, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • I rather like your table of writers, but arm yourself to defend it at FAC, where lists within articles are not popular. Nota bene* Lists are not popular, but often insisting they be put in prose has led to some long (and bitter) arguments in the past. It's MoS GL, not policy. I can't see a ready solution here; --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 12:09, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Lewis' book" – elsewhere you use the British form of possessive for names ending in "s", e.g. "St James's" – a pity to be inconsistent and use the American form here.  Done sentence recast. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 12:09, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Art
    • On my computer (which has one of those newish quite wide screens) there is a huge gap, about 2½ inches, of white space between the first and second paras. Repositioning and possibly resizing the nearby images might remedy this. ✗ Not done Unable to reproduce this glitch on a 27" screen (Mac OS X, FireFox 6, Safari 5) --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:26, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • The two fountains have already been covered quite fully under Architecture, above. You should concentrate all coverage of them in one section of the other, with at most a glancing mention elsewhere.  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:26, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "a squared drawing" – not a common term: explanation or link perhaps? Nota bene*
    • "Courtauld Institute,[135]Joseph Powell's" – space needed  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:26, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "of Victoria and Albert Museum" – of the Victoria and Albert Museum  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:26, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Television
  • Malvern water
    • Further inconsistent use of Malvern water -v- Malvern Water in this section
    • "funded by several organisations, including … the Area of Outstanding Natural Beauty" – feels not quite right: is the AONB an "organisation" and does it fund anything? I rather imagine there is a sponsoring body for AONBs, who would do the funding in this case. But again, I am perfectly willing to be told I am in error.
    • "reason for Malvern becoming" – another place where a gerund would be grammatically correct: "reason for Malvern's becoming" (or, in plainer English, "was why Malvern became")  Done
  • Places of worship
  • Air

Here endeth the second lesson. More anon. Tim riley (talk) 09:15, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Third and last batch of comments
  • Independent schools
    • "It is now the last of the independent girls school" – girls' (possessive) and schools (plural), I suggest.
    • "Malvern St James" – other saints are given a full stop after "St" elsewhere in the article. Either is fine, but I'd be consistent if I were you. ✗ Not done This is how the school spells its name. The links is to a page.--Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:58, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "from countries outside the United Kingdom" – repeated word for word in consecutive lines; could the second instance be rephrased?  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:58, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Leisure
    • "home to the Malvern Theatre" – is this the same as the Malvern Theatres (plural) mentioned earlier? ✗ Not done Malvern Theatres is the name of the complex which also includes cinemas. Malvern Theatre is the resident theatre comppany. Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:54, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "legendary rock bands" – rather a golly-gosh adjective, not to say POV. Nota bene* Deep Purple, AC/C, Barclay James Harvest, The Moody Blues, Jethro Tull, Black Sabbath, to name but just a few. . There are references available for all these, The Rolling Stones also played there and I went to it and got them to autograph a poster (no refs). Do we need to list them to justify the word legendary? I've changed it to 'major rock bands' but this doesn't quite convey the same meaning.--Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:26, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
      • Interesting – and of course absolutely your decision – a peer reviewer is only there to comment, not to command. But have you noticed that "legendary" is only ever applied to minor figures? Try writing "the legendary playwright Shakespeare", "the legendary composer Beethoven" or "the legendary painter Rembrandt" – it doesn't work. Tim riley (talk) 16:30, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Public Library" – why capitalise? (and indeed why blue link?)  Done --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 15:24, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    • "Internet" – why capitalise? ✗ Not done Internet is generally capitalised. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 15:24, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sport
    • "Traditional outdoor bowls are played" – I know nothing of bowls, but I notice that the WP article uses singular verbs for the game – thus, "Traditional outdoor bowls is played". I leave you with the thought. Done Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:54, 10 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Notable people
    • I think you may get this list through FAC without too much flak even from those allergic to lists within prose articles, but I suggest you remove the two people who are not notable enough to have their own WP articles. Nota bene* Woodward has 3 refs - does FA depend upon such notable people having a Wikipedia article? I don't see myself writing a stub just to satisfy this entry. Just needed a Wikilink --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 15:04, 10 July 2011 (UTC) Bilsborough removed.[reply]
  • References
    • I am no expert on references, but I suggest you go through them carefully before FAC, where one of the real experts such as Nikkimaria will turn an eagle eye on them and will find them wanting (mine usually are!). For instance, the completely blue references such as 20, 37, 40 and so on, the square brackets in 24, the italicisation of the wrong part of ref 51, the anonymous ref 61, the capital letters in 106, the first name before the second in 110, the weird opening of 121, and so on.

Nota bene* We need to decide on one system or another. It would be a shame to make them all use the same system just to be told to revert to another. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 15:04, 10 July 2011 (UTC) That concludes my comments. I enjoyed the article, and wish it well. Please let me know when it is at FAC and I will add my two penn'orth there. – Tim riley (talk) 07:59, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]


Blofeld comments

Great article. Little disappointed though by the Places of worship section. Could you expand it and give more details about the actual church names and a summary of them?♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:52, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

There is actually a draft for this section in my user space at User:Kudpung/Places of worship in Malvern, Worcestershire (draft). I also have photos on my hard disc that I took of all the churches. I never got round to finishing this because I was not sure if it should be a stand-alone article or included in the Malvern article which is already quite long. Suggestions would be much appreciated. --Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 14:20, 6 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

A section on churches that was lurking in the Architecture section has been cut and moved here. Kudpung กุดผึ้ง (talk) 12:25, 7 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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