Wikipedia:Peer review/Mötley Crüe (album)/archive1
Mötley Crüe (album)[edit]
I've done a complete revision on this article and would like to have a peer look over it for the possiblity of having it nominated as a featured article. All of the facts have been referenced, and I've tried to make sure that no POV or incorrect statements exist. Darwin's Bulldog 03:48, 27 December 2006 (UTC)
- Hi there. Some suggestions:
- The lead section is too short. Try to expand it to at least two more paragraphs.
If a date includes month and day, you should link them and don't pipe the year in music. For example: ...album released on 15 March, 1994 (see 1994 in music).- Add a few more professional reviews, see WP:ALBUM in the section Review sites.
Music genres such as hard rock and glam metal shouldn't be capitalized.In the track listing, use an en dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-).In the personnel section, link to the instruments on first occurrence, for example:
John Corabi – vocals, acoustic guitar, rhythm guitar, six-string bassMick Mars – lead & rhythm guitars, six-string bass, sitar, mandolin
There's some unreferenced paragraphs. See the album review on the AllMusic Guide.
- I think there's nothing more. Maybe the article is too short for a WP:FA, so you might want to expand it a little bit. Cheers. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 00:40, 28 December 2006 (UTC)
There is a Rolling Stone review of the album here, if you want to incorporate.+ Ceoil 22:54, 28 December 2006 (UTC)
- Nice adds! The article's lookin' better, I appreciate the help. Darwin's Bulldog 06:28, 29 December 2006 (UTC)
- I don't see that it has to be laid out with "Album" as a header and "Background", "Recording" and "Reaction" as sub-headers. I'd make them full headers. Illmatic is often seen as one of the best album pages on Wikipedia, so I'd have a look at that for guidance. For a great article not on a rap album, see 1987 (What the Fuck Is Going On?). Seegoon 19:13, 29 December 2006 (UTC)