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Legacy of Kain: Soul Reaver

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I've listed this article for peer review because I've worked on it to greatly increase its quality from a Start-class. Currently the article contains detailed and sourced Gameplay, Development, Story and Reception sections detailing the game's in-game storyline, its development process and deleted materials, it finish product, and its reception among reviewers. Images are used to demonstrate the article's subject, including an early screenshot, a screenshot from the finished game, and a screenshot to illustrate a point made by a reviewer. Citations are provided and more can be found.

I think the article has greatly increased in quality and I honestly think, due to the high amount of coverage it has received, that with further work it could become a GA article. I'd very much appreciate any further advice on improving it.

Thanks, The Clawed One (talk) 23:36, 15 March 2008 (UTC)

dihydrogen monoxide

• "not developed by Silicon Knights due to a legal battle during the game's development" - I think you should only have the really vital info in the lead's first para; leave the legal stuff to later paragraphs, perhaps.
• Mention exact release date in lead
• There's plenty of good VG FAs out there, but for the best one, look at Age of Mythology (then guess why I recommended it!) for a good guide to layout, etc.
• Gameplay/Story sections should go first; before development
• "Shifter never went into full development" - italics
• "the rights for the Legacy of Kain series were subject to a legal battle between Silicon Knights and Crystal Dynamics" - why? What happened?
• "Gameplay is Soul Reaver relies" - is --> in?
• "time-activated switches - time does" - need a dash here - probably an em dash (—)
• "and is the only weapon" --> "; it is the only weapon"
• I'm sorry...I just can't read plot sections. So unless there's something really obvious I'll probably not find it. I'm sure other people will review that for you :)
• Reception could do with a review scores table (see most VG GAs/FAs)
• Also mention Game Rankings and Metacritic scores
• Sort review section by gameplay/sound/gfx/etc., rather than by reviewer
• "One reviewer noted the game's block puzzles are similar to the Tomb Raider series." - say who it was, and put series title in italics

Hope this helps! dihydrogen monoxide (H₂O) 00:16, 16 March 2008 (UTC)

Thanks! The Clawed One (talk) 02:38, 16 March 2008 (UTC)

Well, the Reception section has a way to go, but as a whole your suggestions have definately led to some massive edits. The Clawed One (talk) 03:10, 16 March 2008 (UTC)