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Guitar Hero III: Legends of Rock[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to nominate it as a FAC soon. Gary King (talk) 04:35, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)
- Not sure on shacknews as a source. What makes this a reliable source?
- Same for Gaming Target?
- Same for Ultimate Guitar Archive? (note I'm NOT a guitarist at all).
- LIkewise Bit-tech?
- The kotaku refs, what makes the authors well known in their field?
- The joystiq refs, same thing.
- The YouTube ref, what makes IT reliable? It doesn't appear to be from the developers, at least from the bibliography. (Note I don't dare try to view the file over my current connection, it doesn't have the bandwith).
- http://lawofthegame.blogspot.com/2007/10/guitar-hero-iii-problems-with.html looks like a blog? What makes this reliable?
- http://forums.xbox-scene.com/index.php?showtopic=628006 looks like a forum post? What makes this reliable?
- Otherwise look pretty decent. 14:43, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
Comments from Gazimoff (talk · contribs)
- infobox
- Image:Guitar-hero-iii-cover-image.jpg needs a full url to the image source and replacability information
- Release dates need citations
- System requirements for PC version might be an idea.
- Lead
- what do you mean by third full title/fourth overall?
- What do you mean by master tracks?
- You mention that co-op career mode is new, but you don't mention battle mode as new as well. Is there a reason for this?
- Gameplay
- Four note chord - what is a rhythm guitar track? What do you mean by expert difficulty? It might be an idea to rearrange this section so that the standard gameplay elements are introduced and summarised first, before moving on to variations and changes for this version.
- when released (by tilting the guitar controller - what is a player's mutiplier? Mention the use of score multipliers earlier on. Also, suggest starting this as a new sentence instead of a semicolon.
- Co-op career mode - I'd consider merging this into Career merge. Make note of the fact that this is new to GH3 - you've mentioned it in your lead yet not talked about it here. Is this available through online play?
- Battle mode - If you don't merge the two career modes together, I'd suggest merging the two multiplayer modes, as they are small sections on their own. You also mention Rockl Meter here - is this the same as the performance meter mentioned earlier? If so, explain it earlier on. Also, the attack can be caticated by tilting the guiar and pressing a button, which button is not important. Is network play the same as online play - if so, be consistent.
- Image:Guitar-hero-3-gameplay.jpg needs full URL source and updated replacability - there's no free use equivalent. Beef up purpose - what are you trying to show to the reader that can't be done through text?
- Wii exclusive features - I'd consider moving this into development instead of gameplay - it was a series of issues faced when the game was being developed, not things that intrinsically affect gameplay. Also, source needs to be found for the Wii 'miss' sounds and remastered disc
- Characters - explain unlocking characters. Can a source be found with the info on characters, including variants for the different platforms.
- Image:Gh3_bret.jpgneeds a replacability reason in rationale. Also, the rationale states it's to identify the use of a singer's likeness, yet the resolution is so low it's difficult to make him out. Is an alternative image available, or a crop of an existing one?
- Development
- Slash being unlocked, reword to avoid VG jargon.
- Tom Morello is a boss - If possible avoid videogame jargon
- I'd look at getting a copyedit for this, as there's a large number of fragmented paragraphs. The Technical Issues section should probably be merged into Reception, as it's stating that poor implementation negatively impacted how the game was recieved.
- Soundtrack - move above Development
- Reception
- Bulk out with info from Technical Issues, earlier
- Most critics have also praised the soundtrack - sounds weasaly, remove Most and add a source
- Focus on what the feedback was and why it was given - the sources will tell the reader who said it. It also makes the section much easier to follow and more understandable.
- Legacy - addon kits and accessories are availble for the controllers, downloadable content, Include this if possible.
That's all I can identify for now. I hope it's of use to you. I would strongly reccomend a copyedit to ensure that the article is readable and flows well. Gazimoff WriteRead 18:30, 14 May 2008 (UTC)