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Dell, Inc.[edit]

I'd like to get this featured - it was tagged with cleanup not so long ago and I worked on it a bit to its current state. What should be done to get it featured? — Wackymacs 02:11, 27 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

  • Needs a copyedit.
  • MoS units: 8 MHz --> 8 MHz
  • Lead needs to be a little longer
  • Round Rock, Texas, United States --> Round Rock, Texas in the United States
  • one of the the world's largest computer hardware companies, --> can you get a specific ranking
  • =Histroy= lacks Dell's expansions. Mention about the company's expansion into major world markets.
  • Some people believe that --> Weasel phrase used. Should be removed
  • Dell's international operations seems to be muted.
  • Avoid fragmenting =Corporate affairs=
  • =Criticism= should be converted to prose
  • www.ihatedell.net --> Forum links are not useful; Yellowikis too
  • Images seem to be lacking. Is it possible to get a free image of Michael Dell? Some non copyrighted images of the headquarters? Take a look at Brihanmumbai Electric Supply and Transport. The =Organisation= anf =Finances= have some great accompanying charts.
  • Pic of a Dell Machine should be obtained.
  • The DELL logo should be converted to an SVG image
  • Images should not be placed at the bottom of a section
  • Some corporate information such as the company's vision, mission statement and goals would be helpful.
  • Try and fill up the red links in the article. It looks much neater that way.

=Nichalp «Talk»= 05:11, 28 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]