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I've listed this article for peer review because this is my very first article about a building, and I need advice and suggestions from you how it could pass GAN and later FAC.

Thanks, ♫GoP♫TCN 13:38, 3 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Looks interesting, I'll review this, I'll try to find time in the next couple days. Mark Arsten (talk) 00:59, 16 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Alright, I took a quick read through and have some comments. Hopefully they're not redundant to the peer review. I don't know anything about Architecture or Russia-related articles, so you might want to get more input from someone who is familiar with the subject. Off the top of my head, Giano has worked on some Russian Architecture articles, I think. But the article seems to be in very good shape, I found it pretty impressive.
  • Comments: (These are just what came to mind, feel free to disregard if you don't think they're improvements.)
  • There are some WP:REPEATLINKs in the last few sections.
  • Check to make sure you're following WP:MOSCAPTIONs, I think there should only be periods after complete sentences in the captions.
    • Done I think
  • There's a bare url in the references.
    • Unfortunately I can't put the full url, as it is only available for people with registration
  • Better check the copyright issue with the videos you link to (see WP:YOUTUBE for the guideline).
    • Removed
  • Be consistent translating the titles of references.
    • Now consistent
  • When giving equivalents of money, try to say what year the comparison was true of (i.e. "corresponding roughly to US$6,800,000 as of 2010" instead of "corresponding roughly to US$6,800,000 at current rates")
    • Done
  • "during a Mass" should Mass be capitalized? (I don't know)
    • mass now
  • Is Orgelbau Kuhn worth a redlink?
    • Linked
  • In the infobox, maybe put a date with "Reconstructed by the Soviets for civil purposes"
    • Added
  • "fall of communism" maybe a wikilink?
    • Linked
  • Might want to add conversion templates to measurements.
    • Done
  • "Virgo Maria Immaculata Concepta" maybe that should be in italics?
    • Italicized
  • "also provided funds towards the end of the work" maybe say "conclusion of the work" so it is less ambiguous
    • Reworded
  • "Prayers in the temporarily adapted..." maybe "Congregants praying..."?
    • Reworded
  • "An important policy..." I'm not sure you need to say this, the context indicates the importance, I think.
    • Removed
  • "Sources vary on when the pinnacles were built: According to some sources..." Should "According" be capitalized here?
    • De-italicized
  • "Latter were fitted out with benches until the closure of the church in 1938; unlike today, the left side reserved for women, the right for men" Maybe find a word other than "today" to use here.
  • There are some copyediting improvements that could be made, but I don't think the prose is that bad, just a bit choppy in parts.
  • That's all for now, let me know if you have any questions. Mark Arsten (talk) 00:16, 17 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "with building commencing in 1901" This is the Noun plus -ing construction, it should be avoided. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:23, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • I am not able to reword the sentence... :/--♫GoP♫TCN 16:10, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "During World War II, it was threatened with demolition," Maybe note who threatened it here. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:27, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Today's heavily downsized and tower block-surrounded church is located in the..." Try to use a specific date rather than "today" or "now".
    • Reworded and replaced those words
  • I don't think you're supposed to put wikilinks inside quotations.
  • "Under communism, the furnishings remained until the 1930s," What's the significance of the "Under communism" part? Mark Arsten (talk) 20:38, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • I agree it is redundant. Removed.
  • "It was constructed entirely from red brick, and was not rendered outside." What does it mean that it was "not rendered outside", could you clarify? Mark Arsten (talk) 23:28, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • I thought "render" is a term used in architecture. I replaced it with "plaster"--♫GoP♫TCN 10:45, 26 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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