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Nicolas Sarkozy

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The problems of the preceding nomination should now be fixed. David.Monniaux 07:58, 11 October 2005 (UTC)

• support All my preceeding comments have been correctly addressed. The article is now comprehensive and as far as I can judge well written. Vb 12:20, 11 October 2005 (UTC)
• Object:
  1. The image Image:Nicolas Sarkozy.jpg is claimed as "fair use", but has no source or fair use rationale.
  2. The image Image:Sarkozy raffarin police2.jpg is not public domain, it's under simple copyright, and should not have been uploaded.

  --Carnildo 04:13, 12 October 2005 (UTC)

Comments The second image is provided by the services of the prime minister and is free to use for any purpose; I do not understand why you tagged it as a "copyright violation". The first image has a source, as written in the image's history: the photographic library of the European Commission. David.Monniaux 07:34, 12 October 2005 (UTC)

The second image appears to be by "David Mendiboure" of the "Matignon Photo Service", which doesn't sound too terribly much like the Prime Minister's office to me. --Carnildo 07:41, 12 October 2005 (UTC)

Carnildo , if you cared to do the slightest research (such as for instance checking Matignon on Wikipedia...), you would know that Matignon in the palace where the French Prime Minister's office are located, and a general collocution for the Prime Ministry. Rama 08:02, 12 October 2005 (UTC)

Oh, but wait, the disambiguation page Matignon has only existed for what... a year and a half? notafish }<';> 08:06, 12 October 2005 (UTC)

I replaced the first image by a photo from an UMP press release (Nicolas Sarkozy is the head of UMP). This surely qualifies under fair use. David.Monniaux 08:43, 12 October 2005 (UTC)

• Support Comprehensive and well-written. An excellent English source of information about Sarkozy. Demi ^T/_C 17:41, 13 October 2005 (UTC)
• Support, jguk 10:06, 15 October 2005 (UTC)
• I can't support this yet. It's not badly written in some ways, but there's an odd awkwardness about much of the prose. Here are some examples:
  • 'Previously, he was a deputy to the French National Assembly. He was forced to resign this position in favour of his ministerial appointment.' —'in', not 'to'? 'in favour of' is not quite idiomatic here ('to take up a ministerial ...').
  • 'He often is nicknamed Sarko'—that would have occurred once, not often. And the adverb is in the wrong place, anyway.
  • 'simply known as Nicolas Sarkozy'—word order is wrong.
  • 'is active in a wide range of political fields'—'Fields' is not quite right—research fields, yes, but not political.
  • 'He previously also held several ministerial posts'—remove 'also', and go through the whole text and remove this word where possible.
  • 'His ministerial responsibilities include law enforcement and working to co-ordinate relationships between the national and local governments'—'Include' means that there are other responsibilities you're not telling us about (which may be the case, but check this). 'and the coordination of the relationships between national and local governments' is what you want.

Now, I've exemplified a few things at the opening. They're subtle, but need to be fixed throughout. A native speaker is required to sift through the article. (I'm not being rude, just practical; there's a lot to commend the article.) Tony 15:00, 15 October 2005 (UTC)