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The article was promoted by Ian Rose 10:05, 16 September 2013 (UTC) [1].[reply]

Eisenhower dollar[edit]

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Nominator(s): Wehwalt (talk) 16:46, 12 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article because… I think it meets the criteria. The Eisenhower dollar was struck for only eight years, but it is a surprisingly complex story. My thanks to BrandonBigheart, and to the Eisenhower dollar collector society, the Ike Group, for images.Wehwalt (talk) 16:46, 12 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support now...Comments and image check from PSky
1) I checked the images during my GA review of this and all is still fine. For prose "force their use by US military personnel" has no periods in "US" but the rest of the article does for that abbreviation.
2) Under sources, your italicizing and formatting of newspaper sources isn't consistent. In some the city is in italics, in others it's the newspaper (which is correct), in some you use the location parameter, in some not--in those location is in the newspaper line. This should be consistent. I'd suggest not manually italicizing things, let the template do it, put the cities in a location line. I agree the New York does not need a location line. See especially Bend, Oregon, Oxnard, CA, and Toledo, OH. PumpkinSky talk 01:04, 13 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Those things are now done, thanks again for reviewing.--Wehwalt (talk) 01:15, 13 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry I didn't catch this before, but states are not consistent, you have: Ga, Calif, N.H., etc and your "other sources" don't seem to be in a discernible pattern, such as alphabetical order by name then title if no author or whatever.PumpkinSky talk 01:29, 13 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
They are standard in that they us abbreviations with a period, rather than the two letter postal abbreviations. The other sources are alphabetical by first significant letter of the publication's name.--Wehwalt (talk) 01:34, 13 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Note: Wehwalt has standardized them as postal codes. Support now. Excellent work!PumpkinSky talk 02:09, 13 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the review and support. Someone once objected to the use of the postal abbreviations, don't recall why. They are fairly universal and I'll just use them in future until someone else objects.--Wehwalt (talk) 14:37, 13 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Sources review

  • Refs 38 and 48: Is "Toledo" part of the newspaper's title? From the ext link it appears to be called The Blade. (Note different format ref 15 The Bulletin)
  • Ref 64 is a p. not a pp.

Nothing else I can see; all sources look sound. Some general comments to follow shortly. Brianboulton (talk) 16:19, 19 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The reason I did it that way is that there are, I am told, two prominent newspapers of gay interest known for short as the Blade. I will place Toledo outside the quote marks. Thank you for doing the sources review. I will change the other one as well.--Wehwalt (talk) 17:02, 19 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

General comments: I am just about old enough to remember Ike, not as president but as an elder statesman by then beyond criticism, a golf-playing symbol of American decency. Maybe I was misled, but I'm glad he got a coin. This is my first look at the article, which looks on the face of it as well-prepared as the others in this ongoing series. A few comments, more to follow (I'm half way through):

  • There's an unfortunate homonymic effect in the lead, from: "...since the Peace dollar series ended in 1935. The piece depicts..."
  • I don't know about AmEng, but we lost the hyphen in "reintroduce" many moons ago
  • I can't understand: "coins of that metal were replaced with copper-nickel clad pieces beginning in 1965, but no dollar coins were initially struck in the new composition". If none of the new kind were struck, then surely the old kind were not replaced?
  • Do we need to have the information about the different compositions for circulation and collectors in both the first and the second paragraphs of the lead?
  • "The new pieces were intended to be used at Nevada casinos and elsewhere in the West where "hard money" was popular." That reads as though the casino usage was almost the only reason for minting the coins, surely not the intention?
I think some people saw the silver dollar as symbolic, it's why there was such a fuss about the metallic composition. But as a practical matter, yes, casinos were the only use for the silver dollar (both in the slot machines and, judging by the James Bond books, as a one-dollar chip. A one-dollar coin has never successfully circulated in the United States. Ever. Even before there was a one-dollar bill to compete.--Wehwalt (talk) 17:10, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I am uneasy with the encyclopedic character of the formulation: "Stated Idaho Senator James McClure" – it smacks of journalism. "Idaho Senator James McClure stated:" would be more orthodox
  • "it was blocked in the House by Representative Patman" - can a single Representative thwart the will of Congress, just like that?
He would not allow his committee to vote on and report the bill, and if no one who was more powerful cared to push him ...
  • "On June 19, 1945, Gasparro was one of more than 4,000,000 people..." - "was" → "had been"
  • I think the parenthetical "as he was then" is pretty well redundant. You have already described Eisenhower as "a former World War II general"
  • "he was instructed to have the layout of the obverse be similar to that of the Washington quarter". Reads clumsily (the intrusive "be", I think). Perhaps "he was instructed to make the layout of the obverse similar to that of the Washington quarter."?
  • "At Congress's insistence, he created..." "He" needs identifying.
  • Close repetition of "created" in "...created a design in commemoration of the Apollo XI lunar landing, based on the mission patch created by astronaut Michael Collins and others."
  • "Collins' mission patch had initially been opposed by some government officials..." Presumably its the use of Collins's patch that was opposed?
  • I've not read a lot about Eisenhower but I rather have the impression that he was noted for his genial image, rather than his actual geniality, that he had in fact little patience and a short fuse – but it might depend on whom you read.
I've taken out the word "his", so "noted for geniality". It's the opinion of the critics, who are biased or they wouldn't complain, I daresay.--Wehwalt (talk) 17:48, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The rest tomorrow. Brianboulton (talk) 20:36, 19 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Here it is (not much):

  • "there was enough public demand that many banks imposed a limit of one coin per customer" - I find the choice of "enough" a little odd, when the sense is "so much"
  • "about 70% of them" - "them" needs clarifying
  • "11,000,000" and "seven million" in the same sentence. I believe in such circumstances MOS suggests consistency in format.
  • "Bicentennial issue" section: the word "Bicentennial occurs 5 times in the first two lines of the second paragraph. Some of the repetition, e.g. "the issuance of a special half dollar for the Bicentennial, and subsequently the committee sought the redesign of circulating American coins for the Bicentennial" looks easily avoidable.
  • A question of wording: "introducing his own legislation, the Susan B. Anthony Dollar Act of 1978". Surely legislation cannot be introduced in the form of an Act? An "Act" is what the legislation becomes after it has been signed into law.
  • The use of the slightly pejorative term "women's lib", in quotes, reads rather dismissively. Why not just "women's rights", without the quotes? To avoid further repetition, Susan B Anthony could be described as a "feminist leader".
I think it's OK to use the contemporary term. I'm not aware that it was derogatory.--Wehwalt (talk) 17:48, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
In the UK, certainly, whatever its history the term is now used by those uninterested in women's rights as a definite put-down, the subtext being "what a load of nonsense". The nuances may be different in the US. I'd favour a change, but it's not a deal-breaking issue. Brianboulton (talk) 15:41, 22 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "two different Las Vegas blackjack dealers." The word "different" is redundant
  • The term "Business strikes" has not been used prior to the mintage figures at the end. What does it mean?

Brianboulton (talk) 14:53, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the review. I shall attempt to get through these today.--Wehwalt (talk) 16:22, 20 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I think I've caught every thing.
  • Support on basis of the responses to the points raised above. Brianboulton (talk) 15:41, 22 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you most kindly for the review and support, I know I've kept you busy lately. On the Woman's Lib issue, I'd be grateful for comments by other reviewers. To me, it just evokes Bella Abzug and Maude and folded more or less gracefully into the modern-day feminist movement during the lean years of the Eighties.--Wehwalt (talk) 15:54, 22 August 2013 (UTC).[reply]
  • Support. I think the reviewers above nailed everything down. One small question:
    • Does Gilkes not have page numbers?
    • Otherwise, great article. A fine addition to the series. --Coemgenus (talk) 00:17, 1 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
No, it's just a page about the coin run by Coin World. No page numbers. Thanks for the review and the support.--Wehwalt (talk) 00:26, 1 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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