Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Benazir Bhutto/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 16:28, 15 March 2008.

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Benazir Bhutto

Nominator: I'm nominating this article for featured article because I think it is very well written, has many references, has no grammar errors (that I noticed), and is extremely important. If you think I'm crazy, this is my first nomination. Mm40 (talk) 21:52, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

Question You don't seem to have made any contributions to this article and have only been on Wikipedia for a few weeks? Were you aware that it is customary for major contributors to nominate so that they can deal with any problems arising and shepherd the article through? --ROGER DAVIES ^talk 01:34, 15 March 2008 (UTC)

• Comment: Why is the article under semi-protection at the moment? Are there any concerns from a vandalism/edit-war standpoint that have recently impacted the article as it relates to 1e of WP:FACR? AreJay (talk) 22:44, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

• Comment Most of the references are lacking publisher and/or last access date. That is the very minimum needed to verify sources. Authors and other information should also be included when known. I'd also really like for the "Book about.." section to be broken down into the more usual "Sources" for books used as sources, and "Further Reading" for works that aren't used as sources for the article but yet would add more information to the reader. I'll try to return to check the reliability of sources after the references have been formatted. Ealdgyth - Talk 23:29, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

• Comment leaning towards oppose (based on a very quick read though).

Family

• Various WP:NPOV concerns. (1) The suggestion is that Al-Haq executed Bhutto's father as an alternative to elections. (2) Pleas for clemency by world leaders are fairly standard.
• Failure to identify the Bhuttos as one of the world's most famous political dynasties. Describing them as "prominent" is massive understatement.
• No mention of the five years she spent mostly in solitary confinement following her father's death.

Prime minister

• Content seems to focus on her first administration in the context of the West rather than her domestic policies. Why the lengthy sub-section on the Taliban? Why the chunk on women? What about her other modernisation initiatives? Why not one section on each of her administrations. ie First administration 1988–1990 and Second administration 1993–1996?

Charges of corruption.

• Undue weight concerns. This section is twice the length of the section on Butto's administrations. Much of it concerns her husband. It shows fails to distinquish between accusations and charges (in the legal sense).

ENGVAR

Bhutto was Pakistani and the official language is Commonwealth English, therefore per WP:ENGVAR British spellings (honour, fuelled, Westernisation etc) instead of American ones {honor, fueled, Westernization etc).

--ROGER DAVIES ^talk 00:01, 15 March 2008 (UTC)

• Oppose, sorry, but this article needs lots of work. Citation style is very messy. Also, an article on such an important figure cannot rely almost solely on internet sources. There needs to be an incorporation of books and scholarly articles. Hopefully that will also improve the article and fix some of the more substantive issues listed above. gren グレン 00:51, 15 March 2008 (UTC)

• Premature FAC withdrawn by nominator. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 16:28, 15 March 2008 (UTC)

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