User talk:Wangemily3

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Emily, you opening sentence covers lots of important info on your author very well. The overall organization is well sectioned from the early career and his general accomplishments. This makes it easier for the readers to see their wanted facts faster. The flow of the page seems okay, I feel like some of his early life sentences don't connect, try stating the war and some facts, then connect how they influence the other countries. Besides that, the intro flows very well. Everything else checks for grammar and sources. Very good! Petranmancan (talk) 17:12, 7 May 2015 (UTC) Peter Tran[reply]

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