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Hi, I think that every section of your wiki page looks great! One thing that I would go a little more into depth about is to add a small description of some of the symptoms, but I did like how you added a transition link for every symptom, in case someone wanted to know more about one specifically! I also liked how your causes/prevention section clearly indicated how there are no known causes/prevention methods instead of leaving that area blank, like we typically see in some wikipedia articles. Overall, every section seems well covered! -Alexa Hurtado

I enjoyed reading the information in this article. It was very easy to read and understand. A few things that could be improved are to categorize the symptoms by the affected area as well as explain a few of the less known symptoms, attach links to subfrontal and transsphenoidal in the treatment if you can or simply explain the terms, and cite your information in the recent research section. Also, I enjoyed the images placed in the diagnosis section but add something brief that discusses what tests are used. Overall, you've done a great job so far! - Jasmine Crank

  • What is a point prevalence?
  • Abstract could use some rounding out.
  • Make sure your article is lay accessible. Use common language when possible, link or define (or both) when not).
  • Needs more citations.
  • How do these lead to the symptoms?
  • How do you find these? You talk about what identifies them, but this would require some sort of scan.
  • Cite all papers in recent research!
  • Focus on major results in research, not details and stats.

--Sweiner02 (talk) 05:13, 25 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]