User talk:Everyday I'm Buffering/sandbox
Hey Juli! I really like your username! I'm looking over your page and I like the way your sandbox is organized although I feel like you could consider planning on putting what images is necessary under week 6 (media files and images). Also maybe do a little bit more research on the bird's wing and provide citations and context for those. Also, maybe consider typing your plan of action for your article to understand what you want to tackle, and to keep more organized.Azyla.m (talk) 17:15, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
Peer Review[edit]
Peer review: Everyday I’m Buffering’s draft for week six shows edits that will be made to the “Morphological changes and energy conservation” section of the flightless bird page, but without assumption I couldn’t tell what their project animal would be. It seems that each team member is editing a different article, so I would be unable to see if equal contribution is applied; however, their sandbox shows a clear plan that they are going to focus on adding images and not editing the word content of the page, so no outside links were used. They plan to add pictures to show the difference in anatomy specifically muscle structure and possibly the bird’s wing to body ratio that is required for flight.
Suggestions:
Find and add the picture they’re thinking about using. Create a draft maybe adding more details about the exact difference and references you would use to talk about that. Some of the sentences in the “Morphological changes and energy conservation” section is very hard to understand and could use some editing. Also, making sure to add more in text citations when new information is added.LepidopteraMonarch (talk) 01:50, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
Peer Review[edit]
Hi Juli,
The picture you wish to add would be a good addition to the article because it gives the reader a visual representation of the sternum as the article mentions the sternum in flightless vs flight birds.
Your topic seems non-biased and I think it will be appropriate in context to the morphological changes. Your source is also peer-reviewed and appears to be credible. I also like how you added hyperlinks to elaborate more on certain definitions.
As a next step, you can try to put your ideas into sentences and make sure it is incorporated smoothly to the existing sentences in the article.
RNAsilencing (talk) 18:45, 31 March 2022 (UTC)