User talk:Aliaa01/sandbox

Review by Salume Osakue

• Good comment = good job with the organization of the sections
• 3 things to work on =

- would need to work on epidemiology and research directions (if any)

- Make sure to state what the abbreviations are even if you cite them. E.g. in the diagnosis section, state what CT stands for

- Abstract should consist of a summary of the mechanism, treatment, and all other sections Lumesti (talk) 15:57, 10 November 2022 (UTC)

Review By Ethan

-Good job on using language that makes the information easy to understand and digestible -Things to work on: 1 Filling up each section with more information 2 Diversifying sources 3 The abstract is lacking summarized key information DaBearsBillSwerski (talk) 21:21, 11 November 2022 (UTC)

Review 3 SP

Your topic is concise and very easy to follow thus far. You were to the point and conveyed the information in a way that makes it nice to follow. I think it also looks very clean.

Not a lot of suggestions due to limited information,however, some things that I would like to suggest:

-If there is more information out there, you can definitely add some on to all of your sections x2

-Once you do add more information, it would be a good idea to find an article that will help you add some information about research directions Scproby (talk) 01:03, 15 November 2022 (UTC)

Dr. Weiner Comments

• Well organized and well-structured. Most of this either uses accessible language or is appropriately linked. With a few exceptions, it's well cited.
• I know the first sentence of signs and symptoms came from the original page, but you can go ahead and fix the grammar anyway.
• Make sure to link all key concepts and jargon the first time you use them. You have a good start on this, but there are a bunch more (e.g. fetal alcohol syndrome, mandible).
• There is information on pathophysiology out there! It's limited, but it does exist. Make sure you include as much as possible. This is where you step through the mechanism of how this happens like you would in a case study in class.
• Needs some copy editing: missed periods and spaces, small grammar issues, etc. Make sure everything is in complete sentences unless it is part of a bulleted list.
• Obviously, you still need to add the epidemiology and recent/current research sections. There is recent research out there, make sure you include it. If you're having trouble finding things, come talk to me.
• Recovery really did make more sense as subheading of treatment. I would encourage moving it back to there.
• A few sections are missing citations.

I tried to change the CT and I am not sure if it got published 192.175.17.21 (talk) 18:15, 15 November 2022 (UTC)

I added all the information that was missing and did minor editing. Thank you all for your feedback, it was extremely helpful.