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Lewis A. Lapham[edit]

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... that when he was 20, shipping executive Lewis A. Lapham played a memorable foursome with golf champions Bobby Jones and Francis Ouimet?

Reviewed: Albert, Alfred and Chris Schlechten‎

Created by Gamaliel (talk). Self nom at 19:52, 9 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Article: Length, date check out. Paraphrasing is a little close to the source. Sources look reliable, but could sources not written by his descendents be found to firm this up?

Hook: Not hooky if we don't know why it was memorable. Length if fine. It would be preferable if it could be cited to a source written by someone else (not a descendent)

Summary:

Paraphrasing needs to be cleaned up, and more third party sources should be introduced. Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:57, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for catching that. I try to be diligent about that sort of thing. Some of the things listed by the tool are proper names (American Hawaiian Steamship Company, etc.) but I will correct the others. As far as the golf match, it less historically notable and more personally notable. I'll try to dig up more sources on the match, I think it may have been mentioned in some of the other sources I used in the article. Gamaliel (talk) 15:06, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I've addressed the paraphrasing issue, the remaining detector hits are on proper names or unrelated passages that share common words. I'm not sure what to do about sources as I'm not sure where to look. I know he was significant in the development of golf in the US, but I've been unable to dig up exactly how. Gamaliel (talk) 19:22, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Appears clean. There are enough third party sources to show notability, although more would be preferable. GTG! Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:26, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]