Template:Did you know nominations/The Broken Cord
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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:26, 17 July 2017 (UTC)
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The Broken Cord[edit]
- ... that a real life subject of the film The Broken Cord, who was diagnosed with fetal alcohol syndrome, died by being hit by a car before the film's release?
- Reviewed: Der Prozeß (opera)
- Comment: I'm surprised I even found this many sources to use for such an old television film.
Created by SL93 (talk). Self-nominated at 01:57, 28 June 2017 (UTC).
Interesting TV film, on good sources, offline source accepted AGF, no copyvio obvious. - Hook: if taken as it is, it should be a real life subjct, because he is not the only one. I'd add at least film - it could be anything - unless you want to focus on that tragedy alone. I confess that the topic of caring for a son with special needs seems worth mentioning somehow. - Article: on this same page, I was told that if quotes were subtracted, it would be too short. Without "counting": could you add a bit, for example to plot, or reception? Looking at the beginning: that is a bit ambiguous, - It reads as if Adam was a different child from the one in the sentence before. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:27, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- I changed the hook and expanded the article's plot and production sections. SL93 (talk) 15:37, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- Ping Gerda Arendt SL93 (talk) 18:48, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- Thank you for the changes. The last line of the plot looks too general, not for the film, imo. - Next time, please word an ALT, - to leave the discussion transparent. What do you think of this:
- ALT1: ... that a real life subject of the film The Broken Cord, who suffered from fetal alcohol syndrome, died being hit by a car before the film's release? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 19:24, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- That's fine. Should I remove the last sentence from the plot then? SL93 (talk) 19:29, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
both, - prep builder can decide. - You decide about the sentence ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:42, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
- That's fine. Should I remove the last sentence from the plot then? SL93 (talk) 19:29, 1 July 2017 (UTC)
