Template:Did you know nominations/Edward C. Cardon
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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:02, 9 March 2017 (UTC)
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Edward C. Cardon[edit]
- ... that Edward C. Cardon was given command of the Second United States Army upon its reactivation in 2014 because he was already commander of the United States Army Cyber Command? Source: Effective immediately, Second Army is reactivated, with the lineage and honors specified by the U.S. Army Center of Military History, and designated as a Direct Reporting. The Commander, U.S. Army Cyber Command is dual-hatted as the Commander, Second Army. and Cardon being appointed as head of U.S. Army Cyber Command.
Created by Mifter (talk). Self-nominated at 18:29, 18 February 2017 (UTC).
Article is new enough and long enough although it reads a little like a curriculum. Sources check out (although www.apd.army.mil/pdffiles/go1402.pdf doesn't work for me), but I think the text needs to be rewritten a little so that it doesn't resemble the sources so much. Image needs its source link fixed. Hook moderately interesting, sourced inline by a link that doesn't work properly for me. QPQ may want to check the sources for the non-hook. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:04, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
@Jo-Jo Eumerus: - Its interesting that the link isn't working for you, it didn't work for me at first either. What got it working for me was clicking through a Bing search (second link here). Either way the relevant text of the PDF is:
3. REACTIVATION OF SECOND ARMY AND DESIGNATION AS A DIRECT REPORTING UNIT.
a. Effective immediately, Second Army is reactivated, with the lineage and honors specified by the U.S. Army Center of Military History, and designated as a Direct Reporting Unit (UIC:W6Z9AA) of the Chief Information Officer/G–6, HQDA. The Commander, U.S. Army Cyber Command is dual-hatted as the Commander, Second Army.
As its PD-USGOVT I could upload the PDF to commons if needed though I'm not sure of its usefulness outside of this citation. In regards to sounding somewhat like a CV the difficulty is that these individuals do not generally have much (if any) information available outside their service history (their service history being the reason for their notability) and without editorialziing I am not sure of another way to present the information though I am open to any suggestions. Regarding the QPQ I tend to do a lot of reviews as a volunteer to try and cut down on our backlog and on that QPQ specifically I had a hard time locating the information that would be needed to verify the proposed ALT and therefore simply approved the original (the other sources used were a combination of books and other official or semi-official documents which all passed a spot check). Regarding the image, the source is unfortunately a dead link though at the time I am practically certain it was valid (the image is clearly an official portrait) though I personally write that off under AGF due to the time between upload and now and the context. Mifter (talk) 20:25, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
- Well, it doesn't work for me either. Otherwise the relatively close resemblance of the text to the sources is the only issue. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:31, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
- Concerning the resemblance I've made a few changes though due to the heavy use of official titles and chronological ordering there is only so much that is possible to differentiate from the sources. Mifter (talk) 20:50, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
then. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 21:19, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
- Concerning the resemblance I've made a few changes though due to the heavy use of official titles and chronological ordering there is only so much that is possible to differentiate from the sources. Mifter (talk) 20:50, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
