Template:Did you know nominations/Donal Reid
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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:02, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
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Donal Reid
... that footballer Donal Reid put out a woman who caught fire in his local church?Source: Irish Independent
- Comment: First sentence of very last paragraph. For April Fools' Day.
5x expanded by Litelad (talk). Self-nominated at 19:26, 14 March 2020 (UTC).
5x expansion verified. New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. No QPQ needed for nominator with less than 5 DYK credits. Regarding the hook, this doesn't really fit the description of an April Fools hook, which is that the hook could be read as a double entendre. The language you're using is also inaccurate: she didn't catch fire, her coat did. I suggest writing the hook this way:- ALT1:
... that retired Gaelic footballer Donal Reid put out the flames when an elderly woman's coat caught fire in his local church?Yoninah (talk) 18:16, 24 March 2020 (UTC)
- That is a good suggestion. Litelad (talk) 01:52, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
- Although the detail seems overlong. Would the following be a further improvement?
- ALT2:
... that former footballer Donal Reid rescued a woman whose coat caught fire in his local church?Litelad (talk) 13:17, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
- @Litelad: yes, shorter is always better. But he didn't just "rescue" her; he stamped out the flames and burned his hands in the process. Could you write it a little more descriptively? Yoninah (talk) 18:05, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
- I see. I can't see any "stamping" in the source though, just patting. The headline does say "woman who caught fire at mass". Anyway:
- ALT3:
... that former footballer Donal Reid used his bare hands to put out the coat of a woman when it caught fire in his local church?Litelad (talk) 00:59, 16 April 2020 (UTC) - Nice! But he didn't put out the coat, he put out the flames. Here's a tweak:
- ALT3a: ... that former footballer Donal Reid used his bare hands to put out the flames when a woman's coat caught fire in his local church?
ALT3a hook ref verified and cited inline. Rest of review above. ALT3a good to go. Yoninah (talk) 01:35, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
