Talk:Welcome to Earth-2/GA1
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Reviewer: Olivaw-Daneel (talk · contribs) 06:21, 23 January 2022 (UTC)
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Interested in picking this up. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 06:21, 23 January 2022 (UTC)
Note: Per authorship stats, the nominator isn't the article's top contributor (courtesy ping Kailash29792). The GAN rules ask anyone who isn't a significant contributor to consult on the talk page prior to nominating; however, "significant" is a bit fuzzy, so this might be ok. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 07:26, 23 January 2022 (UTC)
- I have no issues with Brojam taking this to GA. I just wished he got this edited at the GOCE first, or rewrote all my additions by himself. Kailash29792 (talk) 07:35, 23 January 2022 (UTC)
- I had gone over it and it didn't seem like we needed a GOCE, but we'll see with the review. - Brojam (talk) 18:51, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
- I'll have the review up in a day or two. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 18:56, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
- I had gone over it and it didn't seem like we needed a GOCE, but we'll see with the review. - Brojam (talk) 18:51, 27 January 2022 (UTC)
General comments[edit]
- I don't think yvrshoots.com (labelled as Hollywood North) is a reliable source – it seems like a personal blog of a journalist.
- The webcitation.org links for TV by the Numbers don't work (ref 22, 30).
- There are a lot of long quotes in the reception section. Per MOS:Quote this is discouraged, and may violate copyright (Earwig detects 46% similarity). Suggest summarizing most of them.
- Short/single-sentence sections are discouraged per MOS:PARA. Suggest merging Production and Release, and also some of the short subsections within.
Lead[edit]
- The first sentence is overly long; suggest breaking it into smaller sentences.
It is set in the Arrowverse, sharing continuity with the other television series of the universe, and is a spin-off of Arrow
– there's some redundancy here; suggest trimming.
- I don't think the entire cast needs to be mentioned in the lead; it's supposed to be an overview of the body. I'd just keep the ones most relevant to the plot summary.
- I think it's tough to justify
overwhelmingly positive
in wikivoice. Perhaps change to "highly positive" or "widely praised by critics".
Plot[edit]
- Suggest adding context to terms like "Earth-2" and major character names when first mentioned. (Example from The Flash: "parallel universe of Earth-2", "crime-scene investigator Barry Allen", "speedster Zoom", etc.)
Jay refuses, and privately tells Caitlin that he invented Velocity-6 and previously took it to become faster; the side effects caused his loss of speed, and are gradually killing him.
– some of the commas seem unnecessary; also suggest rewording to avoid the many "and"s.
Reverb, who is also working for Zoom and has greater powers.
– needs a bit of elaboration.
They use their powers repeatedly on him, despite Frost's objections, since Zoom wants him unharmed.
– a bit unclear; it reads like they use their powers because of what Zoom wants.
Production[edit]
written by Katherine Walczak from a story by Greg Berlanti and Andrew Kreisberg
– this isn't in the source. (It just credits all three as writers)
- The sentence beginning
Examples include the fact that
seems overly long; it also has some overlap with the next paragraph. Suggest trimming to a few notable examples. Also it would be helpful to contrast against what the Earth-1 character does.
Robbie Amell plays Deathstorm,[14] Demore Barnes plays Henry Hewitt,[7] Michelle Harrison voices Nora Allen,[9] Michael Rowe plays Floyd Lawton and Patrick Sabongui plays David Singh.
– suggest rewording to avoid repeating "plays". Perhaps "Other cast members include Robbie Amell as Deathstorm, ..."
- The sentence in "Arrowverse tie-ins" is overly long; suggest splitting.
Reception[edit]
- Suggest leading with the superlatives (highest rated, largest audience, etc) before detailing numbers. You could also organize by age group instead of repeating 18-49 twice.
- Will give critical response a relook once the number of quotes is reduced.
Placing it on hold; please ping when done/if you have questions. Thanks, Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 04:58, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
@Brojam: It's been nearly a week, so I wanted to check if you hadn't missed this. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 08:54, 5 February 2022 (UTC)
- @Olivaw-Daneel: Sorry, had indeed missed it. Will get on your feedback in the next few days. Thanks. - Brojam (talk) 04:13, 6 February 2022 (UTC)
- Some of the quotes look paraphrasable, but I think this is good enough to pass GA. In general I'd suggest looking at WP:Reception for structuring the reception section. And it's cool to see that you're working on The Flash. I've enjoyed this show. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 06:12, 18 February 2022 (UTC)