Talk:Tim McGraw (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Candyo32 - Happy New Year :) 02:06, 9 January 2011 (UTC)

Lead

• "The song received much critical appraisal for Swift's vocal delivery." --> The song was received with critical praise from music critics who complimented Swift's vocal delivery.

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• "Some critics described it to be tender..." change "to be tender" to "as tender"

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• multitude is a bit NPOV, could you say "numerous"?

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• uncapitalize chart

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• Music video sentence ---> "The accompanying music video for "Tim McGraw", directed by Trey Fanjoy, is comprised of is comprised of flashbacks by Swift's love interest and intercut with scenes that feature Swift writhing on a lake-bed.

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• ""Tim McGraw" was promoted in numerous venues and with a radio tour." --> "Tim McGraw" was promoted by Swift on a radio tour and performances in numerous venues.

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• "She also performed it as part of the Fearless Tour (2009-10), her first headlining tour." --> She also performed it as part of her first headlining tour, the Fearless Tour.

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Background

• "Rose said Swift showed up at her after school job, writing songs for Sony/ATV Music, "with the idea and the melody. She knew exactly what she wanted." --> A little bit off. Try "....songs for Sony/ATV Music "with the idea and melody", knowing "exactly what she wanted.>"

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• I would suggest a comma rather than the dash used here.

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• comma after twenty minutes

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• For the quote near the end, try putting it in a blockquote or box.

• It's too short for that. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 05:42, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

Ok, I'll let that slide. Candyo32 - Happy New Year :) 19:47, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

Composition

• Second sentence in second paragraph --> "The song fondly reminisces an ex-boyfriend, and directs..."

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• The Dooley quote & sentence --> Sean Dooley of About.com commented on the song, writing, [quote here]"

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Critical reception

• Remove contemporary as it is a redundant word here as an single from 2006 cannot have contemporary critics reviewing it.

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• "homage to Tim McGraw." "It's..." ---> "homage to Time McGraw, commenting, "It's...."

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• For the review by Holland, move the positve reception together and then have the part in which he criticzed at the end.

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Live performances

• Quote about she and her radio tour is a bit irrelevant.

• I don't think so. It was unusual thing for an artist and her explanation for it seems relevant. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 05:42, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

Well it would seem appropriate on the album page for promotion, but if we are just trying to get information about live performances of the single, it seems a bit insignificant. Candyo32 - Happy New Year :) 19:47, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

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• "During mid-2007, Swift engaged as the opening act on several dates for Tim McGraw's and Faith Hill's joint tour, Soul2Soul II Tour (2006–07), where she again performed "Our Song". --> I assume you mean "Tim McGraw." If not, remove.

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• Billboard --> Billboard headquarters

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• She, --> Swift,

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• Link sing-along

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Charts

• I think its extra space at the end of this section.

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References

• Link About.com in first mention

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• Link Andrews McMeel Publishing

• Where? -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 05:42, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

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Think that's it! Great work, make fixes and it should be on its way. Candyo32 - Happy New Year :) 02:17, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

I'm fine with everything now. Congrats. looking forward to seeing more of your work! Candyo32 - Happy New Year :) 21:00, 16 January 2011 (UTC)