Talk:Space opera in Scientology/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Grapple X (talk · contribs) 00:39, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
I think the Dianetics centre down the road still has my number but I'll give this a go.
- Is it reasonably well written?
- A. Prose quality:
- B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
- "Hubbard taught that humans could recall the details of these lives through a process known as auditing" -> I'm quite likely to be wrong, but I believed auditing was the process of removing engrams and achieving Clear; I was told nothing of thetans and past lives (maybe I didn't pay enough).
That's a good point, I was using the term a bit broadly, I know there are a number of different practices in the church and some of them apparently get into the former life stuff eventually. I rephrased to avoid implying that about auditing. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
"Academics who study religion" -> I know "religious academics" doesn't really work here but is there a better way of going at this? Theologians, theology critics, etc?
How about "Scholars of religion"? Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
"Xenu placed several billion of his citizens onto DC 8 planes" -> DC 8 points at Douglas DC-8, is this right?
I believe so, that's where the link on our Xenu article points. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
"Because thetans had been "implanted", or forced to believe, various faulty ideas" -> is the use of implanted correct here? It's in quotes so I assume it's meant to be nonstandard but if the parenthetical comes out this reads "Because thetans has been "implanted" various faulty ideas", which is odd.
Ok, I rephrased that to hopefully convey the same meaning with the awkward/incorrect wording. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
"Urban notes that this is similar to Aleister Crowley's teachings about astral projection, although he notes that Hubbard did not use that term" -> two "notes" here; change the second one to "adds" maybe?
Good catch, changed. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
- "Hubbard taught that humans could recall the details of these lives through a process known as auditing" -> I'm quite likely to be wrong, but I believed auditing was the process of removing engrams and achieving Clear; I was told nothing of thetans and past lives (maybe I didn't pay enough).
- A. Prose quality:
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- No issues here.
- A. References to sources:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- Seems fine.
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Grand.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- Some vandalism but not for over a month; would be wise to keep an eye on it (and yourself. those guys don't fuck about).
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- Maybe move the Rinder image to the left to avoid three images stacked horizontally like that. Images are fine in and of themselves, all free. (File:Planetstoriesclichecover.jpg is Commons, too, but it might be a bit much);
- Moved Rinder to the left, added the comic cover above. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:11, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
- Maybe move the Rinder image to the left to avoid three images stacked horizontally like that. Images are fine in and of themselves, all free. (File:Planetstoriesclichecover.jpg is Commons, too, but it might be a bit much);
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Not really sure I'm putting this on hold other than force of habit, but it's a well-written article with little to be addressed. GRAPPLE X 00:39, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the compliment, and double thanks for doing a quick review. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:11, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
- Not really sure I'm putting this on hold other than force of habit, but it's a well-written article with little to be addressed. GRAPPLE X 00:39, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail:
