Talk:SMS Rover

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Hello User:Crook1 this is my first english article and i wounder if you may like to take a look and tell me what you think... greetings from germany--Mr.Lovecraft (talk) 16:31, 16 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Not bad but needs some work

1. Dates should all be in the same format everywhere

2. The ship was in British service. I suggest adding that part into infobox and adding a section on RN service.

3. Too many mentions of other two ships, Niobe and Musquito. The article is about Rover, so it's ok to mention them once as they were part of the same squadron, but there is no reason to continue describe their movements.

4. I don't have the book that you used, so I assume you translated parts into English. When you do something like that please make sure you change the narrative to your own words. You don't need to use the same language and you don't need to give the same level of details, only the most important parts.

5. The tonnage - 5,000 tons in infobox, 500 tons in text. Which one is it?

6. When you give dimensions, use both measures in text. the ship was British so I assume the original measurements were in feet.

7. Commanders - please remove. Same with her transfer commander Struben - he's not notable

8. There are many places where the ship names are not italicized. Same with missing spaces after .

Good luck.

Crook1 (talk) 15:34, 17 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

User:Crook1 Thanks i appreciate your time.-- (talk) 16:14, 17 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]