Talk:Parnell Dickinson/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Albacore (talk · contribs) 14:41, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Will review shortly. Albacore (talk) 14:41, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments:

In his first three seasons, he led the Southwestern Athletic Conference in total offense. I don't understand; what's "total offense"; total points? most yards gained?

After retiring from football, Dickinson became an insurance salesman and opened up two daycare centers. perhaps "up" should be removed here.

= sign in ref 23; is that supposed to be there?

In that game, Dickinson again came into the game, rushing three times... perhaps link rushing to Rush (gridiron football)#Offense

Dickinson returned two weeks later, failing to complete a pass for the Denver Broncos... might want to reword here, current wording might lead to some confusion (for the Denver Broncos led me to imply he was playing for them)

In the infobox, TDs-INTs should be TDs–INTs, and likewise 1-5 should be 1–5.

I'll be happy to pass this as a GA after these minor issues are taken care of. Albacore (talk) 15:57, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed. Total offense is basically rushing and passing yards combined, found a link for that. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:21, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]