Talk:Max Geldray/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 12:27, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
"; he died in 2004 at the age of 88." - should be separated as it may also mean that his son died at the age of 88 in 2004 (even if that is nonsense), and secondly the phrase has no connection to the other phrase

Link Netherlands, Jewish, Amsterdam

"His father was Leon van Gelder was a commercial traveller," - His father, Leon van ... was..."

"moved out of Amsterdam and into the village of Bilthoven.[3]" - Perhaps, "moved out of Amsterdam to Bilthoven" as a bit sloppy

"and mentioned it to a friend, " - it ;)?

"before joining the Johnny Fresno Band the house band at the Ostend Casino.[13]" - before joining the house band ...

Do you know why they divorced?

Died of natural death?

Overall very good prose
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
No FUR for File:Goons.jpeg
Overall: Hold
Pass/Fail:

Many thanks for this GOP. I think I've covered all your points, but please let me know if there is anything I've missed. Cheers - SchroCat (^ • @) 15:14, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. No other issues discovered, so pass. Regards.--Kürbis (✔) 15:42, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]