Talk:Italian ironclad Principe Amedeo

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Reviewer: Hchc2009 (talk · contribs) 12:51, 19 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]


I'll read through and start the review proper later today. Hchc2009 (talk) 12:51, 19 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

All looks good. Some small points below, and a couple of minor suggestions. Hchc2009 (talk) 18:38, 19 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Well-written:

(a) the prose is clear and concise, respects copyright laws, and the spelling and grammar are correct;

  • "She was the lead ship of the Principe Amedeo class, which included one sister ship, Palestro." - I had to read this twice to check that I'd understood it properly (not being certain about how "sister ship" and "class" interrelated; the "included" also threw me off, as it implied there might be other ships in the class). Something like: "She was the lead ship of the Principe Amedeo class, alongside her sister ship, Palestro." might avoid that.
    • Sounds fine to me.
  • "and converted into a headquarters ship for the ships defending Taranto." - minor, but "and converted into a headquarters ship for the vessels defending Taranto." would avoid the repetition
    • Good idea
  • "Principe Amedeo and her sister were the last rigged ironclad" - "ironclads"
    • Good catch
  • "Neither ship was damaged in the collision, however" - minor, but you could safely lose the "however" Hchc2009 (talk) 18:38, 19 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • Ok

(b) it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.

Factually accurate and verifiable:

(a) it provides references to all sources of information in the section(s) dedicated to the attribution of these sources according to the guide to layout;

  • Was Thomas Brassey both the editor and the author of the journal item in the Naval Annual? Hchc2009 (talk) 18:27, 19 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • I'd doubt it - the yearly naval notes were generally put together by others, and they're not usually clearly credited.

(b) it provides in-line citations from reliable sources for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines;

(c) it contains no original research.

Broad in its coverage:

(a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic;

(b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias, giving due weight to each.

Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

Illustrated, if possible, by images:

(a) images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content;

  • File:Pirofregata Principe Amedeo 1872.jpg needs an Italian tag (NB: unlikely to be a problem, given its age)
  • File:Italia battleship 1880 01.jpg needs a US tag. Hchc2009 (talk) 17:41, 19 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • Both corrected.

(b) images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.

  • "Line drawing of Palestro; Principe Amedeo '​s 10-inch guns were in a single casemate" - I think the MOS would have this one with a full-stop at the end. Hchc2009 (talk) 17:41, 19 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • Added. Thanks for reviewing the article! Parsecboy (talk) 13:29, 23 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      • @Hchc2009: - I wonder if this has fallen off your radar? Parsecboy (talk) 11:39, 28 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
        • Ooops - missed your edits! All look good, just about to pass. Cheers! Hchc2009 (talk) 19:05, 28 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Photo[edit]

here. Parsecboy (talk) 18:12, 7 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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