Talk:Iced Out Audemars

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Date	Process	Result
March 18, 2021	Articles for deletion	Kept
March 19, 2021	Good article nominee	Listed

Current status: Good article

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GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Iced Out Audemars/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 10:52, 19 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

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I will review this soon, per your request... a bit ironic since I originally nominated it for deletion. --K. Peake 10:52, 19 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead[edit]

Infobox looks good!
The remix release sentence should be swapped with the drill and lyrics sentence for the correct order; you can have the final para dedicated to the remix
"A remix that" → "A remix of the song that"
"Musically a drill track, the lyrics" → "A drill track, the lyrics"
"finer things in life and expressing their love for Dior and" → "finer things and expressing their love for Dior, among"
Remove the chorus and outro parts, as this is too specific for the lead

Background and release[edit]

"known their real names" → "known under their respective real names of"
"Khadafi Julio. It was written alongside" → "Khadafi Julio, alongside"
Remove repetition of Khadafi Julio under writing credits
Why is the additional producer not mentioned here and in the lead? Bare in mind, it's not like the infobox where you can't add them.
"debut deluxe studio album," → "debut studio album"
Remove release year in brackets, as it is specified later on in the sentence
Introduce Lil Wayne as being a rapper

Music and lyrics[edit]

"during the chorus" → "during both the chorus" with the pipe
"He pays homage to" → "Lil Wayne pays homage to" but this should start a new para in the section, as it and the following sentences total up to four
"we gone tomorrow"." → "we gone tomorrow."" per MOS:QUOTE on full quotes
Pipe Wu-Tang to Wu-Tang Clan
Pipe pitched to Pitch (music)

Critical reception[edit]

"[Pop Smoke]] would" → "[Pop Smoke] would"
"Complex's Jessica McKinney opined that" → "McKinney opined that"
"while The Fader's Jordan Darville wrote that Lil Wayne added" → "while Darville wrote the rapper contributes" to avoid overusing his stage name
"Jon Powell for Revolt commented that Lil Wayne" → "Jon Powell, for Revolt, commented that he"
"and said "New York's" → "and said that "New York's"

Credits and personnel[edit]

Pipe Bashar Jackson to Pop Smoke
Swap featured artist and songwriter
Swap songwriting and programming

References[edit]

Copyvio score looks very good at 23.7%!
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
HypeBeast → Hypebeast on ref 12

Final comments and verdict[edit]

On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 14:16, 19 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake thanks a lot for the review. Only a few more articles to go! The Ultimate Boss (talk) 20:44, 19 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass now and there were some mistakes but they were not the changes themselves being missed so I copyedited the fixes in, plus good luck with the GT! --K. Peake 21:57, 19 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]