Talk:Hermann Boeschenstein/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: PinkElixir (talk · contribs) 14:07, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I'll be completing this review in the next 2-3 days. Kind regards, PinkElixir (talk) 14:07, 4 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	The prose is clear and concise.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	The lead could better reflect the rest of the article. Please revisit the lead and add more from each subsequent section into it. The lead has been updated to better reflect the rest of the article - Resolved
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	All information is properly sourced, and references follow MOS:REFERENCES.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	All content is appropriately sourced using appropriate WP:RS.
	2c. it contains no original research.	There is no WP:OR.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	There are no signs of WP:PLAG or WP:CV.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	The article focuses on relevant main aspects of Boeschenstein's life. The article might be structured in a more organized way if a "Personal Life" section is added. This section can incorporate some of the information in the latter half of the "Early life and family section," and can also discuss his death, which does not fit in the "Academic career" section as placed now. The revised structure of the article follows a more readable and clear flow. Resolved
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	The article stays focused without adding unnecessary detail.
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	The article follows NPOV.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	There is no history of edit warring or content dispute on the article.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	All images fall under fair use, the appropriate CC license, or are editors' own work.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Photographs used are relevant to the topic.
	7. Overall assessment.	Almost there- please see my above comments about the Lead and adding a "Personal life" section. With these minor improvements, this article will pass GAN. Please feel free to reach out here or on my talk page if I can provide any additional clarification or if I can help make any of my own suggested changes. Kind regards, PinkElixir (talk) 23:34, 6 September 2021 (UTC)[reply] Great work on this article, Kusma! I am happy to pass it! :) ✓ Pass Kind regards, PinkElixir (talk) 17:37, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Response[edit]

Thank you very much for the review, PinkElixir! I've tried to follow your suggestions, even if there is now a slight duplication (the 1928 wedding has to be included in the chronology of the early life and emigration, yet also seems to belong to the new Personal Life section). Writing lead sections is one of my weakest spots, I welcome any other suggestions on what to add or drop. —Kusma (talk) 13:07, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
BTW I'm happy with this: was only added for the DYK nomination anyway. —Kusma (talk) 14:04, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Congratulations on your GAN pass! It was a pleasure reading this article and learning more about Boeschenstein. Kind regards, PinkElixir (talk) 17:37, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! Oddly enough, I was motivated to write this article while doing the GA review for John Adam Rittinger, where I noticed the name for the second time after an encounter with him as advisor of Robert Ludwig Kahn. I was amazed to discover there was so much more to him than just a standard academic career. —Kusma (talk) 18:12, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]