Talk:Doghouse (song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 18:40, 16 January 2019 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- For this part (for their independent second studio album), I think that “from” instead of “for” would be more appropriate.
- For this part (to allow them funding and professional studio time), I believe that “provide” would be a stronger word choice rather than “allow”.
- For this part (a 7" single for album tracks "Squeal" and “Doghouse”), I would remove “album tracks”, as that phrase implies to me that they are songs from an album that were never released as singles. Since both songs were promoted as singles, I do not think that descriptive phrase works in this context.
- For this part (track on point with the other songs on), I would say something like “similar to” rather than “on point with”, as the current wording may be interpreted as leaning toward being too editorial for a Wikipedia article.
- For this part (the female's wanting of control and dominance), I think that “desire for” would stronger word choice than “wanting of”.
- I am not exactly sure what this sentence (Critically, "Doghouse" was deemed in desperate need of a tune-up by music journalist and author Jeff Apt.) means. Does he mean that song sounds out-dated? Too similar to the band’s previous work? It is a little too unclear in my opinion.
- Background and recording
- This part (Despite the underwhelming performance, the label refused to drop No Doubt from the label) reads rather awkwardly, particularly the repetition of “the label”. I think you could just drop “from the label” entirely as it is understood from the context of the sentence.
- For this part (The group started recording their own songs from a makeshift recording studio), I would replace “recording” with “creating” to avoid the repetition of “record”.
- For this part (the group's upcoming second studio album), I do not believe “upcoming” is necessary.
- Composition and lyrics
- For this sentence (It contains a progressive sound that author Jeff Apter considered a common sound within The Beacon Street Collection.), I would avoid the repetition of the word “sound”.
- For this part (han the music in its predecessor,), I think “from” would be more appropriate than “in”.
- Critical reception
- There was only one review of the song? I am not surprised that it did not attract much critical commentary at the time of its release since it was an indie release, but there have not been any retrospective reviews?
- Final comments
Great work with the article. I only have a few minor comments that need to be addressed, and then I will be more than happy to pass this. Have a great rest of your week! Aoba47 (talk) 18:40, 16 January 2019 (UTC)
- Aoba47 – I completed addressing your comments. From the major publications who have written reviews of The Beacon Street Collection, I have only found the one that mentions "Doghouse". However, I'm expecting a few more reviews to be published by next year, which will mark the 25th anniversary of the album and will likely be celebrated in a similar to how No Doubt (1992) was last year. Thank you for the review as always. Carbrera (talk) 00:44, 17 January 2019 (UTC).
- Verdict