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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 07:45, 4 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]


GA criteria[edit]

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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Comments[edit]

I am sorry, but I am "quick failing" the article as there are several issues which are significantly major to prevent this from becoming GA in present state:

  • The most significant issue here is sourcing of the article. Following are uncited sentences and paragraphs in the article:
    • Shortened forms of the state's name include CA, Cal, Cali, Calif, Califas, and US-CA.
    • The indigenous peoples of California included ... among the diverse groups.
    • After the Portolà expedition of 1769–70 ... which remain to this day.
    • The governor granted many square leagues ... in and surrounding California.
    • This revolt by American settlers served as a prelude to the later American military invasion of California and was closely coordinated with nearby American military commanders.
    • California was suddenly no longer a sparsely populated backwater, but seemingly overnight it had grown into a major population center.
    • with only a short break in 1862 ... and September 9 a state holiday.
    • However, due to the existence of a large contingent of pro-South sympathizers ... in the Central Valley and elsewhere. (three continuous paragraphs)
    • There were also massacres in which hundreds of indigenous people were killed.
    • To meet the population's needs ... of public education.
    • It is bordered by Oregon to the north, ... lie west of San Francisco. (six continuous paragraphs)
    • To the east of the Sierra Nevada ...in the United States.
    • Almost entire "Climate" section of 4 paragraphs. It should also be noted that there is a tag especially for "additional citations for verification."
    • California's large number of endemic species ... encroached on their habitat.
    • Entire "Rivers" section
    • Entire "Regions" section
    • First three paragraphs of "Culture" section
    • Entire "Mass media and entertainment" section
    • Almost entire "Sports" section
    • Chunks of "Education" section
    • In addition, several cities such as Oakland, Berkeley and Davis have declared themselves as nuclear-free zones.
    • Nearly all counties operate bus lines, and many cities operate their own city bus lines as well. Intercity bus travel is provided by Greyhound, Megabus, and Amtrak Thruway Motorcoach.
    • "Legislative branch" section
    • California's judiciary system is the largest in the United States&bsp;... house of the state legislature.
    • Entire "City and town governments" section
    • A special district, defined by California Government Code § 16271(d) as "any agency of the state for the local performance of governmental or proprietary functions within limited boundaries", provides a limited range of services within a defined geographic area. The geographic area of a special district can spread across multiple cities or counties, or could consist of only a portion of one. Most of California's special districts are single-purpose districts, and provide one service.
    • Chunks of "Ideology" section
    • Various footnotes
That is quite a lot!
  • The lead section to way too long. See MOS:LEADLENGTH
  • Various unreliable/less reliable references like: www.statista.com, statisticalatlas.com, reason.org, etc.
  • The prose at various places should be improved. Also, there are many one-lined paragraphs which should be merged.
The issues are enough for me to quick-fail, sorry.

– Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:33, 4 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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