Talk:Banksia petiolaris/GA1
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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 19:06, 4 March 2018 (UTC)
Happy to take a look. Josh Milburn (talk) 19:06, 4 March 2018 (UTC)
- "The adaxial surface faces north and is inclined at around 15 degrees off vertical" This all feels a bit technical!
- "The leaf laminae" Ditto
- "4 cm (1 5⁄8 in) wide" That looks like false precision
- "termed the outer surface" That looks like words-as-words quoting, meaning that "outer surface" should be italicised. Or am I wrong?
- "obovate (egg-shaped)" but "wedge-shaped (cuneate)"; this feels inconsistent!
- "1.0–1.5 cm (3⁄8–5⁄8 in) long by 1.4–2.0 cm (1⁄2–3⁄4 in) wide" Are you using the same level of precision in these two conversions? I feel that you should be.
- "1.2–1.4 cm (1⁄2–1⁄2 in) long by 1.8–2.0 cm (3⁄4–3⁄4 in)" Perhaps not the most helpful!
- "reticulated" is jargon, I think
- "or 'teeth' on each side" Why single quotes?
- You seem to switch dash styles between "Distribution and habitat" and "Ecology"
- "mallee-heat" Jargon
- What is "regrading"?
- "Banksia petiolaris has the longest-lived angiosperm leaves so far recorded – a study published in 1992 recorded a lifespan of up to 13 years for a single leaf, while leaves of 10 years of age ably maintained their ability to photosynthesize compared with young leaves." This belongs in the lead! Perhaps the lead could also be expanded with mention of close relatives and a mention of the two separate ranges.
- The cultivation section jumps straight into how-to material. Perhaps you could consider opening the section by saying that the plant is sometimes used in cultivation (or similar), and then frame the how-to material in a slightly different way so that it reads more like an encyclopedia entry.
- "Seeds do not require any treatment, and takes about 18 to 49 days to germinate" I think this needs to be rephrased.
Sources look great. I made a few edits; please do double-check them. Josh Milburn (talk) 19:54, 4 March 2018 (UTC)
- changes look ok Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:39, 5 March 2018 (UTC)
- Great; no further comments. Happy to promote. Josh Milburn (talk) 19:46, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
- changes look ok Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:39, 5 March 2018 (UTC)