Talk:2009 Budweiser Shootout
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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 22:30, 30 July 2019 (UTC)
Lead
On lap 25, a caution flag was given, as Carl Edwards became the leader beforehand.
— This makes it sounds as if Edwards becoming the leader caused the caution.
Infobox
(313.822 km)
...(301.752 km)
...168.564 mph (271.277 km/h)
— This is probably overly precise, and could be rounded to one or two decimal places.Temperatures up to 66.2 °F (19.0 °C); wind speeds up to 10.24 mph (16.48 km/h)
— Do you know the lows as well? That is, could you say "temperatures from X to 66.2 ... wind speeds from xx to 10.24 ..."?Announcers Mike Joy, Darrell Waltrip, Larry McReynolds
...Nielsen Ratings 4.9/9 (Final) 4.1/7 (Overnight)
— Worth mentioning in body? Just a thought.
Background
the others are Michigan International Speedway, Auto Club Speedway, Indianapolis Motor Speedway, Pocono Raceway and Talladega Superspeedway.
— Perhaps "Michigan International Speedway [in X], Auto Club Speedway [in Y]," etc.- Does the front stretch not count as a turn, given that it looks like a bend in the image? And why does it link to Straight (racing)?
it was rebranded the Sprint Unlimited in 2013
— Since Budweiser Shootout now redirects to Advance Auto Parts Clash, has it been rebranded once again?A total of 28 teams were eligible to compete
— Does that mean 28 cars as well, or can teams have multiple cars?In addition, each of the four manufacturers received one "wild card" berth for a car or driver not already qualified
— In addition to the top points getters, or in addition to the 28 eligible teams?- After the 10-minute pit stop, how did the race restart?
Practice and qualifying
Two practice sessions were held before the race, which was on Friday afternoon
— What day/time were they held? Also, seems like the "Friday afternoon" part could go in "Background".- Last sentence in the first paragraph needs work. It's grammatically unsound, but more importantly it seems like it's trying to do two things: give the order of the second qualifying round, and give the order of the entire qualifying draw. (I think you're missing Denny Hamlin.)
chose their starting positions by a lot
— Was any "choice" actually involved, or was it essentially just drawing numbers from a hat?I had my eye on the bottle
— What bottle?
Race
The 75-lap race began at 8:10 p.m.
— So it was the practice sessions (see above) that were on Friday afternoon? The way that part is worded, it makes it seem as if the race was on Friday afternoon.Logano did the same for missing the mandatory pre-race drivers' meeting due to him participating in the track's ARCA Re/Max Series race.
— Seems kind of harsh, any idea why they do that?Menard held the lead going into the back stretch
— of the first lap?the top seven cars were in a single file with Earnhardt the first driver on the outside lane, and by the conclusion of the lap, side-by-side racing began.
— Was Menard on the inside lane? If they were single file, why was there both an outside and an inside lane?were collected in the crash
— Odd phrasing.Kahne took the lead on the 27th lap, but Kyle Busch passed him for the position, but the latter had no assistance from Johnson, as Kahne regained the lead.
— Confusing sentence.from another car to regain the lead
— From what car?Jeff Gordon fell behind in the middle lane
— What lap?Edwards and Kyle Busch ran into the infield grass
— Was this on the lap after the pit stop?Kyle Busch led Earnhardt
— Did he pass him coming out of pit lane?Earnhardt lost the draft after getting loose
— What does it mean that he lost the draft? Why would he benefit from drafting if he was at the front?Biffle was tagged by possibly Mears.
— "tagged" is a bit jargoney. And why "possibly"?sent him up the track.
— What do you mean by "up the track"?McMurray's sizable lead
— How sizable?bump drafting was observed
— What's bump drafting? Also, you should probably say what happened, rather than what was observed.event-breaking
— You mean event-record?it bounced several times
— What does this mean?
Overall
- Looks good, MWright96. Comments are above; I still need to look at the images and references. --Usernameunique (talk) 22:30, 30 July 2019 (UTC)
- @Usernameunique: Have made edits to the article where appropriate. MWright96 (talk) 07:01, 31 July 2019 (UTC)
- MWright96, just a few further comments above. Meanwhile, the images look good, though I would suggest adding alt text. --Usernameunique (talk) 21:24, 2 August 2019 (UTC)
- @Usernameunique: Have added the alt text to the images. MWright96 (talk) 06:46, 3 August 2019 (UTC)
- @Usernameunique: Been one week. Any progress on the review? MWright96 (talk) 11:06, 10 August 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for the reminder, MWright96. Did another brief read through, and am now promoting. One note about the references: You don't need the retrieval dates for archived links, since you already have the archival dates. --Usernameunique (talk) 18:58, 11 August 2019 (UTC)
- @Usernameunique: Been one week. Any progress on the review? MWright96 (talk) 11:06, 10 August 2019 (UTC)
- @Usernameunique: Have added the alt text to the images. MWright96 (talk) 06:46, 3 August 2019 (UTC)
- MWright96, just a few further comments above. Meanwhile, the images look good, though I would suggest adding alt text. --Usernameunique (talk) 21:24, 2 August 2019 (UTC)
- @Usernameunique: Have made edits to the article where appropriate. MWright96 (talk) 07:01, 31 July 2019 (UTC)