Talk:Justin Bieber on Twitter/GA1
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Reviewer: Thine Antique Pen (talk · contribs) 19:06, 9 June 2012 (UTC)
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'He uses [[hashtags]]' ⇒ 'He uses [[hashtag]]s' — hashtags is a redirect.'At one point his fans accounted for three percent of all Twitter traffic' — what point in time? 'At one point' does not say much to me.'... make topics about him like #INDIANEEDSBELIEVETOUR #biebsinparis #JustinbieberinHolland trending' — I'd rather not have that in the lead, topics trend all the time and looks a bit messy.
Introduction
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'...collaborations he was involved with and topping the chart' — which chart? UK, US?'His decisions regarding which followers to retweet is a random decision' — clarify please?'For a brief time in 2011, Bieber quit Twitter' — I'd like a bit more than that. What date did he quit? When did he come back?'When Bieber makes a joke on Twitter about what he is doing, it often gets mistaken by people as the truth and ends up reported as true elsewhere' — the source (#13) says about a supergroup. Please explain in article.'Author Mike Skinner in "The Story of the Streets" says based on the Twitter metrics, "all roads lead to Justin Bieber"' — says ⇒ said. "The Story of the Streets" ⇒ italics needed, as it is title. However, not that notable — could be removed.
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'He has also tweeted about the Kony 2012 campaign' — when did he tweet that?'He also tweeted about the passing of Whitney Houston' — when did he tweet that?'Bieber has also tweeted against texting and driving' — when did this happen, eh?
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'After hitting the 6 million Twitter follower total in November 2010, Bieber gave a shout out to his followers, saying "6 MILLION OF THE GREATEST FANS ON EARTH ON TWITTER!!!! THANK U"[23] Following this news being picked up, #6millionbeliebers became a trending topic on Twitter' — only include higher ones in my sight.- 'When he passed the 11 million follower count' — when?
- '... he tweeted "#11MillionBeliebers! I LOVE YOU ALL!! THANK YOU....tonight was already a fun great night and now it is even better. THANK U THANK U THANK U' — cut quote with an ellipsis, I don't need a full tweet which is easily researchable.
'In December 2011, following Drew's dismissal from The X Factor' — Drew-who? Which X Factor? Normal? US? etc. Possibly removable.Quite short. Possibly could be merged into Paragraph 1.
Technology, marketing and the media
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Again; 'at one point accounted for three percent of all Twitter related traffic' — when?'This resulted in over 180 million page views for the service each month' — what is meant there? Twitter? @justinbieber? Explanation required.'In 2010, Stephen Colbert, Drake and Justin Bieber were the three most re-tweeted celebrities on the site' — any specific time, or is this throughout the whole of 2010? Clarification required.'Immediately following Bieber updating, sixty responses to him are posted a second' — when? What is meant by that? Is what is trying to be said that when he posts something, sometimes [(when?)] he gets up to 60 responses in a second. Also, sixty ⇒ 60, as it is below 10.- MOS:NUMBER: numbers greater than nine, if they are expressed in one or two words, may be rendered in numerals or in words Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:02, 10 June 2012 (UTC)
'In fact, he was named the top trending star on Twitter in 2010' — I don't like the way that is worded, removing 'In fact, ' would be suitable.'Bieber fans were upset with Twitter and tried to cheat the new algorithm by getting related words and mispellings connected to Bieber to trend including the words Twieber and Jieber' — remove? I see no point in saying that they were upset, because not all of them would be. Maybe 'some' would be more applicable in this case.'Bieber related topics would continue to trend on Twitter,[47] including MSG-ANNIVERSARY[48][49][50] Beliebers Love Jelena,[51] and "Happy Birthday Pattie"' — remove comma before reference 47, add comma after MSG-MSG-ANNIVERSARY, remove comma after 'Beliebers Love Jelena' due to the fact that 'and' follows after it.
- Comment - the comma after Jelena is called a serial comma and is perfectly acceptable. LadyofShalott 23:43, 9 June 2012 (UTC)
'The Bieber topic in March 2011 he trended alongside the iPad and Charlie Sheen' — doesn't make sense in my sight. Maybe replace with 'In March 2011 the Bieber topic trended alongside Charlie Sheen and the iPad'?
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'Klout gives his account a score of 100' — when was the score given? What does this mean? If in past-tense should be 'gave' or something suitable like that.Suggestion: Lady Gaga, the top followed on twitter? 'He was ahead of ...''... search results for Bieber will pull in Bieber related Tweets in a search results section called "Latest News."' — remove period from quote of "Latest News" as there is not a period in the original quote.
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'Bieber's tweets drive sales online' — please remove, not required, and how if not removed?'Bieber was in an advertisement for Best Buy at a time when he had around 8 million followers' — when was this 'time'?'BET' ⇒ Black Entertainment Television.- Done. 01:54, 10 June 2012 (UTC)
'On the other hand ...' — would like rewording please!
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Followers and fans
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Twitter mishaps and controversy
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'Bieber, along with other celebrities, has been the subject of the false reports of his death on Twitter,[4][122][123] including reports in 2011' — what time in 2011?
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- Fine.
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- Fine.
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- Grand-ish, nothing major.
I'll put this on hold for now so the issues are addressed. Regards, ⇒TAP 20:00, 9 June 2012 (UTC)
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I don't want to see Twitter articles on here really, but I'll pass this one as all the points have been addressed. Regards, ⇒TAP 10:26, 10 June 2012 (UTC)