Talk:Frank Spedding/GA1
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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 18:49, 21 August 2015 (UTC)
I will review this article. Expect comments within a few days. Snuggums (talk / edits) 18:49, 21 August 2015 (UTC)
- Infobox
- A picture would be nice to have here
- Yes. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:48, 26 August 2015 (UTC)
- So why is there no picture in it right now? Seems incomplete without one Snuggums (talk / edits) 01:19, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
- Yes. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:48, 26 August 2015 (UTC)
- For an American subject, MDY format should be used for dates per MOS:DATE
- Lead
- Is Spedding known to have had Canadian citizenship? If not, he should simply be described as an American chemist rather than a Canadian American per MOS:BIO, which says to generally just include nationalities.
- See above note on MDY format
- Early life and education
- Again, use MDY format
- His mother's maiden name (Marshall) should be included
- Did Spedding have any siblings? If so, include their names and whether they were older or younger
- A "was" should be placed between "he" and "born" in "Soon after he born"
- "showed great promise" doesn't really seem formal or neutral
- Early career
- I've said it before and I'll say it again: please use MDY because this is an American subject
- How and when did Spedding first meet his wife Ethel? How long were they together before marrying??
- When was his daughter born?
- Add a comma after "Around this time"
- Manhattan Project
- MDY, not DMY
- "The best way"..... most effective would be a better description
- Later life
- I'd make these four short paragraphs into two or three longer paragraphs per MOS:PARAGRAPHS, which discourages really short paragraphs
- Once again, please use MDY
- "Over the years" → "Throughout his career"
- Is "250 peer-reviewed papers" referring to the 260+ articles mentioned here on page 3 of the PDF?
- Dead link needs to be replaced
- This does not explicitly mention December 15, though I did find that date here, and it can be used in place.
- Added. It does implicitly though, since we know December 16 was a Sunday, so Saturday was December 15.
- It's probably worth including he had three grandchildren at the time of his death
- Done. I don't normally include grandchildren, because often more are later born.
- If known, I'd include what Spedding died from
- Patents
- I don't see how this section is really needed as it only contains a list of links
- Notes
- Again, MDY should be used
- For FN16, I don't think it's necessary to include page numbers for the Seaborg PDF or have it as an sfn ref as it is the only reference to this document
All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:48, 26 August 2015 (UTC)
- Sorry for not getting to this sooner, Hawkeye7. Good work so far. The main thing this needs right now is an infobox image. Snuggums (talk / edits) 01:19, 30 August 2015 (UTC)
- Overall
- Well-written?
- Prose quality: Decent, but needs improvements
- Manual of Style: Could be better
- Verifiable?
- Reference layout: Questionable use of "Sfn" for one of the refs
- Reliable sources: Looks good
- No original research: Close, but not quite
- Broad in coverage?
- Major aspects: Mostly good, but a few bits are missing
- Focused: No excess detail
- Neutral?: Almost
- Stable?: Nothing of concern
- Illustrated, if possible, by images?
- Appropriate licensing: Does not apply since there are currently no photos used
- Relevance and captioning: It would be worth adding a picture of Spedding to the infobox