Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Shadow of the Colossus
Shadow of the Colossus[edit]
May try to take this to featured article status, though it needs more sources. If possible I'd like specific feedback on the "Description", "Story" and "Characters" sections, and what would count as reliabe sources for the "Connections to Ico" section. -- Steel 16:31, 1 July 2006 (UTC)
- The description, plot, and characters sections carry a lot of really detailed, redundant information. The (almost nonexistent) plot could probably be described in a third of the space dedicated to it; Avoid blow-by-blow descriptions. Nifboy 20:51, 1 July 2006 (UTC)
- Agree with Nifboy's suggestions, although I think the plot doesn't need to be reduced by that much. Avoid excessive additive terms such as "additionally", "moreover", "also", and so on — these seem to raise a few objections at FAC if overused. Usage of the word "only" can be seen as POV; for example, "developed with only a team of thirty-five people". The last few sentences of the basics section may be considered gameguide-ish by some voters. — Deckiller 20:09, 31 July 2006 (UTC)
- I've addressed the game guide-esque bits at the end of the basics section, and the use of "only" under Development. I'll review the uses of "additionally" and such tomorrow when I've got time. Thanks for the feedback. -- Steel 20:41, 31 July 2006 (UTC)
- Agree with Nifboy's suggestions, although I think the plot doesn't need to be reduced by that much. Avoid excessive additive terms such as "additionally", "moreover", "also", and so on — these seem to raise a few objections at FAC if overused. Usage of the word "only" can be seen as POV; for example, "developed with only a team of thirty-five people". The last few sentences of the basics section may be considered gameguide-ish by some voters. — Deckiller 20:09, 31 July 2006 (UTC)
Some people have raised concerns that the use of the PAL cover in the PAL version section of the article may have to go due to fair use laws (the PAL cover being very similar to the NA cover). What's best to be done with that? -- Steel 20:41, 31 July 2006 (UTC)
- This PR began almost a month ago and hasn't seen much action. Maybe we should take it to normal PR? Ryu Kaze 21:56, 31 July 2006 (UTC)