Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Operation Varsity

Operation Varsity

I've chosen to submit this article for peer-review because I'm a new user, and would really like some peer feedback for the article from more experienced users. Skinny87 (talk) 19:42, 21 April 2008 (UTC)

Cam

I've left my comments on the talk-page of the article itself. Cheers! Cam (Chat) 00:30, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

Talk:Operation Varsity#Peer Review Request. (Link for reference). Woody (talk) 13:03, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

Woody

I notice you are getting lots of help on the talkpage so I will make it brief. It is a very well-written article, and it is developing well. Couple of suggestions:

• WP:DASH Make sure you have – between numbers and dates so 1943–44 and in p. 1–4
• WP:MOSNUM Some of the dates had "the" in front of them which is unneccessary e.g. " on the 23 March 1943" should be on 23 March 1943"
• An image or two would be useful, though I know it is hard to acquire them.
• Citations. It needs to be more thoroughly cited when summing up eg."Although the result of this drop aided the British troops landing against German troops, and the 513th quickly rallied, it was still a fundamental error, and one that should have been solved after so many operations. The failure to correct this flaw again shows that the Allies did not completely learn from the errors made during their previous operations, despite the flaw existing for several years and being crucial to the success of any successful airborne operation." is entirely uncited. Without a citation it is WP:OR
• Existing citations. The links being used in the "Notes" section need to be formatted and attributed correctly. Wikipedia:Citation templates are helpful in achieving this. See Victoria Cross for an example of how they can be used.

So, an excellent start, but still needs some rigorous citations and little MOS fixes. Well done. Woody (talk) 13:15, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

Ryan4314

Great lead, two very minor comments though;

• "Operation Varsity was a World War II (maybe stick in a "joint American-British" here) airborne operation that took place (and maybe a "towards the end of the war" here) on 24 March 1945.

• In regards to the ref for "as well as being the largest in history", you might want to read this; Wikipedia:Lead section#Citations. I'm not saying you should change it, just thought you'd be interested. Ryan4314 (talk) 19:31, 1 May 2008 (UTC)