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List of campaigns of Suleiman I[edit]

I have recently expanded the article, and would like some feedback before nominating it for Featured list candidates. Since I do not have any experience in preparing FL, I have made a request for Peer review, before the article is actually finished. Here are some of issues that could use a good advice from more experienced editors:

  • Lead?
  • Infobox military conflict - Belligerents (should I remove them, or expanded with every single country involved in these Campaigns)?
  • Several citations and 'Campaign paths' that are missing, will be added soon.
  • I am aware that all images will have to have alt text, but should I leave the images or remove them from the article/list. If we leave it (which I prefer since most of them are closely related to the related Campaign), should I insert image caption in 'Notes', to describe them?
  • 'Notes' section describes 'Campaign path' for a particular campaign, as well as the most important things of the campaign. Is this too much, or maybe too short?
  • Should I add a new column which describes what was an Otoman Victory, Otoman Defeat, or Indecisive or unclear outcome?

Any other suggestions or questions would be welcome! --Kebeta (talk) 12:56, 13 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Dank[edit]

Welcome to peer review. I'm impressed by your list of known languages and the quality of your Good Articles. I'm mainly a copy editor, and I covered the Campaigns section.

  • The date formats need to be the same (you have 6 November but August 29).
  • I'm not clear on what you're saying here: "The Habsburgs once again engaged in conflict with the Ottomans attempting to lay siege to Buda, which was governed by Isabella Jagiellon, with continued support from Suleiman. A humiliating defeat was inflicted on the Habsburgs in the Siege of Buda (1541) when the Ottomans responded to a request for help from Isabella Jagiellon." - Dank (push to talk) 03:41, 19 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks Dank for your help. Well, don't be so impressed by mine list of known languages, since hr-bs-sr are very similar. As for your second point, it goes something like this...Buda was governed by Isabella Jagiellon with Suleiman's support. The Habsburgs were attempting to lay siege to Buda. Suleiman took personal command of the Ottomans relief army. Ottoman relief army reached Buda and defeated the Habsburgs.--Kebeta (talk) 21:23, 22 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

AustralianRupert[edit]

Hi, good work with this. Just a few consistency suggestions from me. Feel free to ignore if you don't agree:

  • the title has "Suleiman I", but the article has "Suleyman I" - probably should be consistent in the spelling;
  • the date in the infobox probably should have an endash rather than a hyphen per WP:DASH;
  • the References section is in a smaller font to the Further reading section - this should probably be consistent;
  • Footnote # 3 should end with a full stop to be consistent with the other two footnotes;
  • some of the citations end with full stops, but some don't (for instance # 17, 20, 22, 23, 24, 29, 34) - this should probably be consistent;
  • some of the citations have endashes for pages, but some don't (for instance # 11, 28, 32) - this should probably be consistent;
  • check the capitalisation of the titles in the References. They should be consistent with WP:MOSCAPS#Composition titles. For instance, the Faroqhi work should be: "The Ottoman Empire: A Short History". There are a few others that probably need tweaking in this regard also. AustralianRupert (talk) 00:26, 2 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

FIfelfoo[edit]

I mostly do citations, bibliographies, sources

  • Watch your terminal periods in citations, some have terminal periods, others don't.
  • Watch this: p.200 versus p. 200. You use both at the moment.
  • This name string "Ágoston and Alan Masters, Gábor and Bruce (2009)." is unintelligible. Is one author's name solely and only "Agoston", and another's "Gabor Alan Masters" and a third solely "Bruce"? See Corvisier, André; Childs, John for an intelligible presentation
  • You might as well give us the title of the entry cited in Agoston
  • Publisher locations: all items should have them, or no item should have them.
  • Similarly with ISBNs (where available)
  • Publisher states ( New York (USA) ), all or none

Otherwise looks good. Fifelfoo (talk) 16:45, 3 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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