Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Tim O'Brien (illustrator)

Tim O'Brien (illustrator)[edit]

This article is my first contribution to Wikipedia. I have attempted to follow all of the guidelines for creating useful and informative content, although I am certain to have made some mistakes and would appreciate any guidance offered.
My particular area of interest is contemporary American illustrators and I would like to continue to contribute informative biographies on that subject. Thanks for any suggestions and tips to creating successful content. Rezimmerman (talk) 23:08, 18 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou[edit]

Your references are well-formatted, but the problem is the lack of content! The article includes a lead, and then just a list of honors and awards, and an "Influence" section with no analysis; almost no prose; just a small sentence. Expand your article, add material, create a well-written biography, and then a peer-review will be more helpful. I think that at your stage you should try first follow these nice tips about how to create a biography.--Yannismarou (talk) 09:01, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from DrKiernan[edit]

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Similar to what Yannis has said above:

For longer articles, the lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, but here the lead is the article! Please see if anything can be expanded upon.^[?]
No images! Please see if there are any free use images that fall under the Wikipedia:Image use policy and fit under one of the Wikipedia:Image copyright tags that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to Special:Upload; to upload non-fair use images on the Wikimedia Commons, go to commons:special:upload.^[?]
Very minor point: you may wish to add {{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}} along with the required parameters to the article - see Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.^[?] DrKiernan (talk) 14:18, 20 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]