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Zinfandel

• A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for August 2008.

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I've listed Zinfandel for peer review because I'd like to elevate it to Good Article status, it has already been nominated, but nobody has reviewed it yet, so I thought I'd take the opportunity to get a quick peer review first. In particular, I am interested in the automated script looking it over for cleanup issues that I may have missed.

Thanks, ~Amatulić (talk) 17:42, 29 August 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

• The lead seems to me to be a bit sparse. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way but the "United States East Coast" (no apostrophe by the way) does not seem to be in the lead for example. Please see WP:LEAD
  • I added a couple sentences about its introduction to Puglia and the U.S., and mentioned the uncertain origin of the name.
• Article needs more references, for example there are several citation needed tags in the article.
  • All "citation needed" and other questionable tags have been addressed.
• Refs are inconsistent - for example books are not consistently cited. Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
  • All cleaned up.
• Per WP:MOS#Images, images should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to take over. For portrait format images, "upright" can be used to make the image narrower.
  • Done.
• My biggest concern with the article is its logical / organizational structure. For example in History, United States East Coast starts with this sentence Parts of Croatia had been ruled by the Habsburg Monarchy since 1527, although Dalmatia was not absorbed until the fall of the Venetian Empire in 1797. - doesn't this belong in the preceding Europe section?
  • It certainly does. I haven't figured out a good way to rearrange the history yet.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 22:43, 6 September 2008 (UTC)

Thank you for your comments. A GA reviewer also had similar comments about the history section, and that will be rewritten. As for the lead section, I'll see what I can work in from the major sections. ~Amatulić (talk) 00:40, 9 September 2008 (UTC)

Glad to be of help, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 20:32, 15 September 2008 (UTC)