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Wolf: A Journey Home

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to know what work this Good Article may need to get it ready for a featured article candidacy, other than trying to address the Orphan tag.

Thanks, -- AnmaFinotera (talk · contribs) 17:26, 23 March 2010 (UTC)

• Comment: I added one link at 1997 in literature, but I'm not sure if that's enough to remove the tag. At any rate, is there a reason why the author doesn't have her own article? Even if it were a stub, that would be three articles to link to this one. María (habla conmigo) 17:56, 26 March 2010 (UTC)

Alas, 'Asta Bowen really isn't notable. She wrote this novel, and one other barely noticed non-fiction book. Mostly, she seems to live a pretty quiet, private live and is just a regular person. -- AnmaFinotera (talk · contribs) 18:09, 26 March 2010 (UTC)

Some one also added a link from Wolves in fiction and I added it as a further reading on Wolf reintroduction. Hopefully that should be enough. It is a pretty hard one to find good links too.-- AnmaFinotera (talk · contribs) 17:36, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: This reads well. I caught a few proofing errors and fixed them and noted a couple of others below, and I have a few other suggestions for improvement. Good job overall.

• I'd suggest adjusting the alt text to include the words printed on the cover: "A yellow book cover, with the title, "Hungry for Home: A Wolf Odyssey", written in a prominent serif-font along the top and the author's name, Asta Bowen, at the bottom. Above the author's name, is an oval with a wolf lying in a grassy field with a forest visible behind it." Or something like that. The existing alt text has a typo ("in on").

• I added a link from Wolves in fiction to this article. I think it would be fine to remove the tag since that makes three new links that have been added recently. I've never seen this tag before and did not know that incoming links could be an actionable issue. Is it?

Lead

• "after becoming outraged over the continued poaching of wolves" - Wikilink poaching on first use?

Plot

• "specifically the aging lead that Marta favored and refused to hunt herself" - Word missing after "lead"?

Development and publication

• "sans the one pup that escaped" - Maybe "except" instead of sans since it is more familiar to readers.
• "Using radio collars, biologists were able to track each of the pack members from their release to their eventual fates" - "Each" is singular, but "their" is plural. Maybe "... able to track the pack members from their release... "?
• "The pups born to Marta and Greatfoot were born in Spring 1990 in Ninemile Valley... " - Repetition of "born". Maybe "Marta and Greatfoot's pups were born... ". Also, spring should be lower-cased.
• "When Marta's radio collar went silent, authorities searched for her body for weeks until her broken radio collar was found in a creek." - Re-cast to avoid repeating "radio collar"?

Aftermath

• Wikilink Thanksgiving?
• "One, Camas, escaped after waking up from the tranquilizer earlier." - Do you mean "waking up early from the tranquilizer"?

Reception

• " feeling that she allowed "her sympathies distort reality" - Is the word "to" missing from this direct quote?

References

• "You'll Howl With Thier Pain in This Mostly True Tale" - "Their" is misspelled in citation 2.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the backlog at WP:PR. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 17:43, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the good review (as always) :-) Adjusted the alt text and thanks for the link. I believe the general idea is if absolutely nothing links to an article, is it really that notable? Or something like that. Rest done. -- AnmaFinotera (talk · contribs) 17:54, 30 March 2010 (UTC)