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Vital Pharmaceuticals

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I've listed this article for peer review because…

I am trying to expand the article while avoiding a COI

Thanks, RollinSwollen (talk) 14:45, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

Note to nominator: Due to a shortage of reviewers, peer reviews are being delayed for up to two weeks. It will help to speed things up if you can find time to review one article from the backlog list, which appears on the WP:PR page. Thanks. Brianboulton (talk) 23:38, 23 July 2010 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments: This brief stub needs to be expanded before a peer review is appropriate. Please note that, according to WP:PR, peer review "is intended for high-quality articles that have already undergone extensive work". The article appears to be the work of an inexperienced editor; it might be worth studying WP:DEV or other Wikipedia guides before proceeding. Brianboulton (talk) 16:45, 29 July 2010 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work here, here are some suggestions for improvement of the article.

• First off, the article is so short that it is difficult to make many comments on it. If it could be expanded using reliable sources that would help.
• A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow - there is one WP:FA on a pharam company, Icos, which may be a good model.
• I had many questions remaining after reading the article - where in Florida is the firm (city)? WHen was it founded? What is its corporate history? Who is the CEO? Is it privately held or publicly traded? How many employees does it have? Does it have its own manufacturing facilities or does it merely re-brand products others manufacture for it? See the model article.
• While it is OK to have links to the firm's own website, the article should use more independent third-party sources per WP:CITE and WP:V
• There is one external link (about the lawsuit) that needs to be converted to an inline ref (this is a good source)
• Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful.
• Any chance for an image of the headquarters or a facility they own or operate? I think the logo could be used under WP:FAIRUSE
• The Redline (drink) article needs refs and reads like an advertisement in places - try to clean it up too or it may be nominated for deletion (no independednt sources to establish notability - see WP:NN)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 12:54, 1 August 2010 (UTC)