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The Simpsons (season 3)[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because it is part of many featured lists, and with some work and feedback, The Simpsons seasons could become a featured topic. Thanks, Teh Rote (talk) 18:20, 28 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I've been slowly working on the page, and it still has a ways to go. I have to add some production info, and the synopsis' of each episode need to be cleaned up and expanded. -- Scorpion⁰⁴²² 18:59, 28 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: This is a good start but needs some work to get to FL status. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

I note that The Simpsons (season 1) and The Simpsons (season 2) are both already Featured Lists and would make excellent models for this article for ideas on structure, style, etc. Seasons 4 through 9 are also FLs and would be models.
Normally I would say that WP:LEAD would forbid linking anything in the bold part of the lead sentence, but I notice the model articles also link the Simpsons.
Follow chronological order - The season contains all 23 episodes, with two hold-over episodes from season two's "7F" production line. The complete third season was released on DVD in Region 1 on August 26, 2003, released in Region 2 on October 6, 2003 and released in Region 4 on October 22, 2003. A bonus episode also aired on August 27, 1992. This goes from 1991-1992, then to 2003, then back to 1992 again. Looking at the models, I would rewrite this as something like The season contains 26 episodes, with two hold-over episodes from season two's "7F" production line and a bonus episode that was originally supposed to be the season four opener, but aired on August 27, 1992 instead. The complete third season was released on DVD in Region 1 on August 26, 2003, released in Region 2 on October 6, 2003 and released in Region 4 on October 22, 2003.
Should the lead still read The Simpsons third season originally aired between September 19, 1991 and May 7, 1992. since the last episode aired August 26?
Watch tense - this should all be past tense, but Al Jean and Mike Reiss take over as show runners, while Hank Azaria becomes a regular cast member.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs - expand or combine them.
Do not use & as in Kirk & Luann Van Houten., spell out "and" instead.
The lead should summarize the whole article but does not mention Awards, for example.

Hope this helps, with all the models to follow this should be fairly easy Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 23:10, 1 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]