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The O.C. (season 4)[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because it is the last season in the series and I would appreciate any comments before taking it to FLC.

Thanks, Rambo's Revenge (talk) 22:52, 28 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Matthewedwards (talk · contribs)

Check out Fox Broadcasting Company, which refers to it as "Fox", not "FOX"
- Done, and i'll try to remember to do the other seasons some other time.
"against Lost and Criminal Minds" --> "against ABC's Lost and CBS's Criminal Minds"
- Done
"anymore" --> "any more" or "additional"
- Question: I changed "any more" -> "anymore" the other day as, according to this, "anymore" is the AmE version.
  - Hmm, I've always done it with a space, and have never been corrected. Oh well, leave it then. Matthewedwards 16:37, 31 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"This was the first season without one of the "core four";" --> "This was the first season without one of the "core four" characters;" do you have a reference for "core four"?
- Done and Done
Does the sentence "Before the season was shown on television, it was available through on demand streaming." refer to Aus? It's not clear.
- Done
Move "In the US streaming was available from October 26, 2006 at 3:01 a.m. ET on Fox Interactive Media's MySpace and MyFoxLocal stations.[9]" to the end of the third paragraph, with the other stuff about it being availiable through other outlets
- Question: I don't understand. Currently it is the penultimate sentence of the third paragraph already. It is the one sentence before streaming in Canada as chronologically it was streamed in America first.
  - Oops. I meant the second paragraph. The third paragraph is all about foreign broadcasting, so the US streaming should be in the second, with XBox, iTunes and DVD, etc. Matthewedwards 16:37, 31 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done
"having previously been a recurring role." singular, but discussing two people. "held" sounds better than "been", I think
- Done
Perhaps say that Chris Brown is the singer
- Done
I would move the cancellation section into the Reception section, and not bother with a section heading.
- Done
"With the death of Marissa, and low ratings it was rumoured that the show would not return," seems out of place. Rumored it would not return when? For a fifth season, for this fourth season?
- Done
- "rumoured" --> "rumored" US-English for US subject
  - Done
- Try "Due to a combination of low ratings, and the death of Marissa in season three, it was rumored that the show would not return for a fifth season."
  - Done
Also the September 06 comment by Rachel appears before the June 06 comment by Fox, which is odd, chronologically
- Done
"however president Dawn Ostroff" --> "however, CW president Dawn Ostroff"
- Done
mention in the Lede that this is the final season
- Question: It already does, the second sentence is "The O.C. 's final season aired ...", does it need clarifying further?
  - No, I must have just missed it. Matthewedwards 16:37, 31 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"[...]" instead of "(...)"
- ✗ Not done That's not what this says, unless I am missing another consensus elsewhere.
  - Yup, you're right. Matthewedwards 16:37, 31 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 24 needs a publication date
- Done
Try to find alternative to Amazon.co.uk and DVDorchard.com.au, so it doesn't look as if we're positively biassed towards those particular sales sites. Magazine articles, perhaps? Or does WB have DVD sites in the UK and Australia?
- ✗ Not done whilst I agree, I can't find anything else that reliable for Aus or the UK. (I found one for S3 but that's no real help here)

Looks alright otherwise. Matthewedwards 19:45, 30 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I have addressed or questioned all of your comments. Please let me know your responses to the things I have either questioned or not done. Many thanks, Rambo's Revenge (talk) 14:34, 31 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]