Wikipedia:Peer review/The Marriages Between Zones Three, Four and Five/archive1
The Marriages Between Zones Three, Four and Five[edit]
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I've listed this article for peer review because it is currently a GA and I would like to take it to FAC. I'd appreciate it if anyone has any feedback or suggestions.
Thanks, —Bruce1eetalk 14:21, 24 April 2017 (UTC) User:Bruce1ee, sorry for the delay and I will try to find some issues:
- The first paragraph is a bit small. Normally, the first paragraph of a novel article tends to take place in the beginning.
- Avoid quotes in the lead and remove the reference. Try using a more generalized comment.
- The Zones introductions also seem to big for the lead (in comparing the actual zones). Can you simplify it?
- Is it possible to expand the reception? You could also find similarities to make the prose flow more. For example "Like X reviewer, Y reviewer liked the story"
Other than that the article looks in good shape. I just recommend using paraphrase quotes, something which I have often been critised. Lastly, could you check my peer review? It's Wikipedia:Peer review/Yu Kanda/archive2. Regards,Tintor2 (talk) 22:51, 10 May 2017 (UTC)
- Thanks for picking up this review and the helpful suggestions. I'll have a look at the outstanding points you've raised. I'll also have a look at your peer review, but I must warn you that my knowledge of manga is effectively zero, so it'll be a review by the uninitiated :) —Bruce1eetalk 13:58, 11 May 2017 (UTC)