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Sweet Dreams (Beyoncé Knowles song)[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because i want to take it to FA in the future. Please help me.

Thanks. Jivesh Talk2Me 18:01, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments.

  • "Sweet Dreams", one of the first songs composed for I Am... Sasha Fierce, was originally called "Beautiful Nightmare". --> "Sweet Dreams" (originally, "Beautiful Nightmare") was one of the first songs composed for the album I Am... Sasha Fierce.  Done Jivesh Talk2Me 17:29, 25 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • It was written and produced by Knowles, along with Jim Jonsin, Wayne Wilkins and Rico Love. --> It was written and produced by Knowles, Jim Jonsin, Wayne Wilkins, and Rico Love.  Done Jivesh Talk2Me 17:29, 25 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • The song leaked in March 2008, the day after it was recorded and eight months prior to the album's release. It was the first time that a single of Knowles had been leaked before its inclusion on then upcoming album. --> The song was leaked the day after it was recorded in March 2008, and eight months before the album's release, making it the first Knowles' single to be leaked before its inclusion on an upcoming album. (leaked should be linked or explained)  Done Jivesh Talk2Me 17:29, 25 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Knowles responded the leak on her official website --> Knowles responded to the leak on her official website
  • Knowles recorded the song in hour --> Knowles recorded the song in an hour  Done Jivesh Talk2Me 17:29, 25 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Rico love revealed to --> Love told  Done Jivesh Talk2Me 17:29, 25 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Knowles, who like the background vocals of Rico Love in the hook of "Sweet Dreams" decided to keep them. --> Knowles liked Love's background vocals in the hook and retained them. (background vocals and hook should be linked or explained)  Done Jivesh Talk2Me 17:29, 25 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

These are just from the first paragraph of "Background". The rest of the article should be thoroughly combed for other errors. I don't like the quote box to the left. It should be incorporated into the main text. 56tyvfg88yju (talk) 01:32, 20 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

    • Thank you for having started the PR. I will start applying the changes soon. Jivesh Talk2Me 19:02, 22 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]