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This article is looking decent (much better than it looked during its GAN a few years ago) but I'm sure that more work needs to be done. I know that the prose needs tweaking in some areas and I often notice grammatical errors as I scan the article. A thorough copy-edit would likely help. Anyways, some constructive criticism would be appreciated.

Thanks, GroovySandwich 23:16, 13 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by User:Tintor2

  • The lead does not require references per WP:Lead making sure everything within it is sourced in the article's body.
  • Considering the body's length, the lead could be expanded to three or four paragraphs to cover more subjects (the maximum amount is four paragraphs).
I've expanded the lead somewhat but I'm not sure if it's sufficient. Writing leads is not exactly something I'm great at and I ended up just rehashing plot points--GroovySandwich 02:06, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • The file Three Super Saiyan Stages of Son Goku.PNG does not seem very useful now that infobox image also features Goku's transformations. Nevertheless, the infobox image also shows other characters besides Goku, so that could be a trouble.
I've been thinking of replacing it with a singular image of the character. Will get to that soon--GroovySandwich 02:06, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Infobox image replaced by image that depicts Goku's most common appearance--GroovySandwich 08:13, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • The voice acting section needs formatted references rather than the current ones.
  • I don't think that the abilities section would a problem with GA goals, but with FA it may be.
  • Appearances and Appearances in other media are very separate from each other. Maybe they could be joined with their respective subsection titles.
 Done Combined, with the latter now a sub-section--GroovySandwich 02:06, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Considering the character's popularity, critical reception could be expanded, but I think it's okay for a GA.

Anyway, the article is looking very good. Regards.Tintor2 (talk) 01:37, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments!--GroovySandwich 02:06, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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