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Sid Haig[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I had nominated it two times for Good Article and was told by the person who failed it that I should run it by PR before renominating. I don't think it'll ever get FA status but I would like it to achieve GA.

Thanks, CyberGhostface (talk) 03:11, 22 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)[edit]

Hi CyberGhostface, some comments which should help the article on its way to GA.

Expand the lead per WP:LEAD, probably two paragraphs.
" is perhaps best known " - stick with encyclopaedic terminology.
"Haig's career began somewhat by accident" again, non-encyclopaedic, almost speculative.
"which shot to #4" - same again.
Headings per WP:HEAD should not have "The...", so just "Pasadena Playhouse" will suffice.
"When Sid ..." - overfamiliar. Use Haig.
Avoid squashing text between images per WP:MOS#Images.
The prose could do with a good copyedit, it reads a little like a fan wrote it right now. It just needs to be tighter and more neutral and encyclopaedic in tone.
Most of Acting section is uncited.

Hope some of that helps. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:56, 25 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]