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Serotonin

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'm interested in suggestions on how to improve the article in general. Where are its weakest points, and what can be done to improve it to GA status?

Thanks, Åkebråke (talk) 15:48, 15 December 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article and clear that a lot of work has been done on it, still more work is needed before this owuld have a chance of passing GA. Here are some suggestions for improvement.

• The automated tools find several problems with the article that will need to be fixed. There are several disambiguation links (dabs). There is at least one dead external link and one problem link that need to be repaired or replaced. The images have no alt text - see WP:ALT
• The lead needs to be expanded per WP:LEAD - the lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself.  Done
• For expansion, my rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way
• The section headers do not follow WP:HEAD - for example the title of the article should not be repeated if at all possible, so "Effects of serotonin deficiency" could just be "Effects of deficiency" or perhaps even just "Deficiency"
• Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase.  Done
• Article needs more references, for example the name serotonin is something of a misnomer and reflects the circumstances of the compound's discovery. It was initially identified as a vasoconstrictor substance in blood serum – hence serotonin, a serum agent affecting vascular tone. This agent was later chemically identified as 5-hydroxytryptamine (5-HT) by Rapport, and, as the broad range of physiological roles were elucidated, 5-HT became the preferred name in the pharmacological field. needs a ref or more than one. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.  Done
• Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. Be consistent on abbreviations (periods at the end). See WP:CITE and WP:V
• Gross anatomy section is very listy - could this be converted to prose to improve flow?  Done
• Also try to avoid short (one or two sentence) paragraphs and sections as they also impede the flow of the article - either combine these short paragraphs / sections with others or perhaps expand them.
• Do the Americans have names? Serotonin was originally discovered by Italian Vittorio Erspamer in Rome in 1935 and American scientists in the late 1940s.  Done
• Think of the reader and provide context - see WP:PCR
• Be nitpicky and make sure things are consitent - C. elegans should be italicized every time, for example

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 04:59, 2 January 2010 (UTC)

Thanks a lot for your comments! Åkebråke (talk) 14:13, 2 January 2010 (UTC)