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Senedd

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to try for the second (and hopefully last time) to get it through to Featured Article status. It has already had one Peer Review.

Thanks, Seth Whales (talk) 12:36, 25 October 2009 (UTC)

Here are the possibilities I see for improvement:

• The introduction should give some sense of its size. I was immediately curious, but couldn't get a good sense of it from the picture. It took me a while before I found the square footage buried under the heading of "second phase of construction."
• The construction story is lengthy and dominates the article. I suppose that may be normal for a new building, but I would prefer to see some of this split out to a subarticle and summarized here. The first six sections could all be subsections under a single level 2 heading called "Construction," or sections of the subarticle.
• The construction story should start by establishing the need for the building. On first reading, I completely missed the fact that the Welsh assembly is a new government and thought they were just moving to a new building.
• If the building was so advanced and won so many awards, I would think that some engineering journal articles would have been written about it. I did not see any in the citations. Did you search for these?
• Do you think Template:Infobox Modern building would be useful?
• I believe the section "Building details" should be called "Architecture"?
• The first sentence of the "National Assembly complex" confused me at first, because I didn't understand why the complex was relevant. I think it would be clearer to say "The Senedd is part of the National Assembly complex, along with..." to clearly establish the link.
• The "National Assembly complex" could give more context of the site within the city. Is this downtown? A historic district? Is it accessible by public transit or highways? Close to hotels and restaurants? Rundown or vibrant?
• I like to see article sections in order of importance, so I think that "Building Details"/"Architecture" should come first. The overbudgets and fatality will be forgotten with time, but the architecture will be used and remembered.
• What was the media's and the public's reaction? A new seat of government usually gets people's attention, especially when it goes overbudget. So far the story is told as if lawyers and bureaucrats were the only ones who showed any interest in the building.
• What's a "Cwrt"? Is that a Welsh word?

--Yannick (talk) 03:49, 28 October 2009 (UTC)